 Some Sugestions
1. Use some line breaks
2. Seperate all of your idea's with subtitles for your paragraphs
3. I got about halfway through that and all lightnings coming in within 6" of eachother is too close, they're flyers so i'd make it 24".
And finally welcome to Librarium Online!
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