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    White Scars Background

    For a tournament coming up in just under 2 weeks will will get bonus points for presenting some army background.
    I know what the background is going to be but i don't know how to lay it out as to be 40k ish.
    i was thinking that it could be in the style of a mission document or something along those lines. (any better suggestions would be greatly welcomed)

    The idea behind my army is that Kor'sarro Khan was shot in the face by a bolter round and had a large portion of the left hand side of his face blown off. surviving through sheer stubbornness and determination he survived long enough to get extensive bionic surgery on the left portion of his face. His anger and lust for vengence was so intense that he immediately set of with 50 of his best and loyalist men who, like him, had lost something of great importance in that war. with hardly a word they set of to hive city Wakefield with a lust for blood and vengeance.

    So what do you think? any ideas on how to improve or how i could lay it out?
    Thanks in advance. (P.S. it has to be 200-600 word in length and can include pictures)


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    Hello curly24242!

    Does ist have to be Kor'sarro Khan? He is a named character, and his fate is in the hands of GW. Why don't you invent your own White Scar character (he can be a captain too, that should not pose a problem, and you can even play him with the Kor'sarro Khan rules), and give him a unique name along with the background you came up with? I would find that a lot more suiting, while it would also spare your arguments with other players who might tell you that Khan has actually done this and that, judging by official GW material, etc...

    As for how to present it: the Index Astartes articles are the usual way Space Marine chapters' backgrounds are presented. Here is the part of an Index Astartes article on the Imperial Fists, describing their combat doctrine. There is usually a section about the chapters past (when and why and where was it founded), its home world, beliefs, and combat doctrine. There are some good DIY chapter background articles here in this section of the forum, and also elsewhere on the internet. There are also some good threads and articles on LO that discuss how to make a good chapter background, just browse through the stickied threads above...

    Good luck!

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    That kind of major change to a set special character isn't that good of an idea, as permanent damage of that degree changes the character forever. Best idea would to come up with your own character and use Kor'sarro's stats. You could even say that your character was the Master of the Hunt before Kor'sarro, and your army fights as if it were in the end of the 39th millennium, rather than the end of the 40th.

    Other than, pretty good, fits the role of the Master of the Hunt pretty well.

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    Can anyone think of a good name for his predessesor then?

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    Quote Originally Posted by curly24242 View Post
    Can anyone think of a good name for his predessesor then?
    I would go for something Mongolian, probably. Try here, for example.
    Maybe take the "Batsaikhan" (which means "strong-nice") and make a "Bat'Sai Khan" out of it, for example. I also like Tömörbaatar ("iron-hero") very much, though: "Tömör'Baatar Khan" or something like that.

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    I finished writing the background for my tournement army! This is what i have got. any suggestions or improvements would be greatly appreciated. Sorry for the long read.

    At the start of the 41st millennium the White Scars master of the hunt was leading the first company in the assault of Therrax V. It was a comparative peaceful mining planet on the eastern fringe of the galaxy. Little did they know that many miles beneath their feet was a large vein of psyco-resonant invaluable to chaos sorcerers.
    Several companies of the Thousand son’s legion descended down on the planet with the lust for power. The world was under chaos control with days and drilling took place soon after. When they got their hands on this ore it would increase their power infinitely. The white Scars chapter was the closest to the planet and rushed there with lightening speed, intent on thwarting the powers of chaos.
    They made planet fall one week after chaos and faced heavy resistance. Thunder hawks and drop pods blocked out the midday sun as they descended on them with the wrath of the Emperor.
    Two weeks into the assault Bat’sai Khan, the current master of the hunt, faced up against a vile Lord of Change. At first a single sorcerer stood there. Then his armour rippled and cracked and grew to monstrous proportions. Huge feathered wings unfolded where his backpack was. Two vulture like heads ripped out of the helmet. In one of it’s long, thin, taloned hands it held a staff made of ivory and gold. Flames of all colours danced serenely in the other. They fought one on one for hours on end, neither of them relenting for a single moment.
    The Greater daemon of Tzeench struck Bat’sai khan in the face with a blast of pink lightning and melted through his helmet and flesh, searing right down to the bone. Though this may have killed a normal man he summoned from within himself enough power to cleave one of the foul beast’s heads clean off, before sliding limply of the side of his beloved bike, moondraken.
    But still he fought on, having to watch his nemesis fly off in fear, struggling to retain it’s physical form. The chapter apothecaries worked the hardest they ever had to keep him alive on the way back to the command base. Not once did he lose consciousness. Not once did his eye cease to burn with hatred.
    For a day and a night he stayed in surgery, all the while refusing anaesthetics. He endured having metal welded onto bone and nerves attached to wires. The entirety of the left hand sides of his face was replaced by bionics. One eye burning with hatred, the other eternally watching. Waiting for the day that he can banish the foul daemon back to the hell from whence it was spawned for a thousand years and a day.
    As soon as the apothecaries would allow him to leave he sent out a servant to deliver some urgunt messages. He gave his title of master of the hunt to a promising sergeant going by the name of Kor’sarro. No-one saw him after that however there are tales of him having rounded up fifty of his best men, all of them loyal, brave and fuelled by hatred.
    As they, like him, had lost something in that battle. They took up bolter and chainsword and saddled up. They knew they may not come back, but none of them cared. None of them looked back as the Thunder hawk flew out of the docking bay. There were looking at the future, at hatred, at vengeance.

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    Any thoughts?

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    Really good, except for two things: one, the Chapter Master gives the title of Master of the Hunt, not the previous holder. Second, why would he relinquish the title? This is just the sort of quest that the Master does. Your Lord of Change is an enemy of the Chapter that escaped, and it is the Master of the Hunt's responsibility to bring it to justice. These hunts take years, even decades, and the Master can be involved in other campaigns when the trail grows cold, so you can have your tournament battles happening when the trail has grown cold, or say that any objectives are clues to the daemon's whereabouts.

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