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Have just started 40k (Exactly two weeks ago) and have got the basics of my army up and running a new chapter as none of the GW ones really inspired me. As with all my forces (several LOTR and Fantasy) I really want to make a exciting and original fluff for the army; so whilst building my models and posing them in the most epic way possible, I started thinking about their background and have come up with a few ideas that I think are interesting and needed input from you guys to tell me if something doesn't fit, wouldn't happen or is just plain wrong as I'm not up to date with the 40k universe.
So without further delay, the very basic ideas for my chapter - The Sons of Baalich.
Color Scheme - Crimson armor with silver decals such as the Aquila eagle. Trim and helmets are white. All firearms are silver with jet black casing. Armor is chipped and scratched heavily.
Homeworld - None
Gene-Seed - Ultramarines, founded for the Astartes Praeses.
Chapter composition - Currently has four full companies of Marines and the Ceteri Frater company.
Honor and traditions - The Sons of Baalich strive to uphold the honour and traditions that had been laid down by the first chapter master himself. When chosen to become a marine each squad is chosen together, trained, altered and brought into the chapter together. As scouts they fight and until each member of the squad has proven himself to be worthy of wearing the colors of Baalich, none of them are permitted to become a full marine. This way of initiation causes the chapters warriors to become more than battle brothers, each places his trust in another and with this trust they know no fear or lack of faith in themselves or those around them.
As the marines go through this process each squad build upon the basic traditions of the chapter and can form their own rituals and ways to honour the dead, treat their weapons and almost every other way of life. Other chapters and parts of the imperium see this as a weakness as each squad seems to stem away from the core of the chapter, weakening it, but nothing could be further from the truth. These shared traditions further reinforce the trust of each brother creating a almost unstoppable fighting force.
The teaching of Baalich the first also states that each marine can only evolve and improve and none shall ever reach perfection in battle. If a brother is a master with his bolter then he shall be stripped of it and given another weapon to become his companion. Because of this tradition each marine is exceptional with a great number of weapons and if needed, he could easily switch his role to fit with what role the chapter needs him to perform.
When a new chapter master is selected to continue the crusade against Chaos, he chooses one brother to become his champion. These two form a unbreakable bond and throughout the time that the master serves, he constantly trains and instructs his champion in the way of battle, tactics and even non-military matters such as politics and art. With this tradition, it seems that Baalich never does die as the champion has had his skills trained and moulded to mirror Baalich exactly, further enforcing the illusion of immortality.
With each squad in the chapter having such a tight bond to each member, it is unheard of for a squad to welcome new members and so once a squad falls below five members, the remaining marines are removed from their current company, their own armor swapped for that of their fallen brothers and initiated into the Ceteri Frater, a company that sole purpose is to hunt down the traitor that betrayed Baalich. This company consists of bike mounted marines along with Land Speeders and assault marines.
If the chapter hears of a planet tainted with Chaos, the Ceteri are sent out before any other can respond to scout the planet and find the source of the corruption with hopes that it will be the Inquisitor. The key to the companies survival is stealth, and they are usually there and gone before any other force arrives although if the situation is dire, then the company will stay to aid whoever answers the distress call.
This company is kept hidden from all but the chapter master and his champion, not trusting the Inquisition due to the very reason it was created and the distrust of others who may be corrupted by chaos.
This company is differentiated from other marines from the chapter by the black robes worn around the crimson power armor and also the trims and hellmet of the armor being black instead of white. It is not unusal for the company to be away from the main chapter for years at a time. Moving from planet to planet during their search it is only to receive new members or times of great need that the Cetari return to the battle barge.
Just the basics until I can really fluff it out - The history of the chapter is one of sadness and betrayal. With no homeworld to call their own, The Sons of Baalich base their chapter from a battle barge situated just outside the eye of terror, forming part of Astartes Praeses, intercepting and destroying any Daemons and followers of chaos that emerged from the eye. The battle brothers were trained in close quarters fighting aboard the various sips that emerged and on occasion, within their own, flushing the enemy from cramped spaces and winning from sheer tactical superiority to the enemy. The chapter carried out this role with loyalty and honor, never turning away from an enemy, no matter the size or number. The chapter master, Baalich Masoon swore an oath before every encounter that he would avoid death until the forces of chaos had been eliminated entirely and with each battle, he never fell to the enemy, despite horrendous wounds that would have slew a marine several times over.
When a Inquisitor by the name of Ceder came aboard his ship and called upon Baalichs chapter to aid him in investigating a planet thought to be housing followers of chaos, Baalich did not hesitate and gave the order to pull from the eye and head towards the doomed planet (Not decided a name yet). Upon arrival Baalich found the planet to be a small Imperial world far from any other and a strange interferance that wouldn‘t allow scanning of the world below. Ceder informed Baalich that the threat was nothing that the marines could not handle and so, trusting the inquisitor, ordered two full companies to the surface and the other marines were to stay about the vessel and wait further orders. Upon the planets surface, Baalich made his first priority to find and nullify the source that was blocking contact to the reinforcements orbiting above them. Eventually the source was tracked down to a large city several miles from where the forces landed and as they approached shadows began to loom from the crumbled buildings and ruins. Knowing that this would be the chaos forces that Ceder had spoke of, Baalich gave the orders to prepare for battle. Knowing the the battlefield was no place for the inquisitor, Baalich ordered that Ceder be given a bike and sent back to the landing zone, which he took without question, a small smile crossing his lips, just as Baalich turned to the approaching forces and took his oath, just as he always did.
(This will be more fleshed out) The battle was fierce and although outnumbered, the chapter managed to set up defensive lines and hold back the chaos forces for three days and three nights despite heavy losses, seeming to be a never ending tide that streamed from the city. On the fourth day, Baalich gave the order for a retreat as the chaos forces began to overwhelm the marines, Baalich and his command squad covering the other marines as they did so. Turning to join his battle brothers in forming a new line of defence some half a mile back, Baalich saw the barrel of the corrupted inquisitors bolt pistol and with one movement of his finger, Ceder placed a single shell in the skull of the chapter master and with the Chaos forces still pushing forward, Baalichs command squad could do nothing but watch. Wrought with anger and grief at the loss of their master, the command squad turned away from the Chaos forces and opened fire at the traitor in a act of vengeance. A bolter shell cracked Ceder in the shoulder, tearing off his arm just as the Chaos forces over ran the make shift defences and forced the squad to enter into the fray of close combat.
After much more bloodshed, thunderhawk gunships descended from the sky, bringing much needed support to the surviving marines, communication channels suddenly becoming clear which allowed the distress call to reach the battle ship overhead. The full force of what was left of the chapter came crashing down on the Chaos followers and within the hour the battle was won, but with a great price paid.
The body of Baalich was brought upon the chapters vessel and for days the highest members of the chapter debated on what action should be taken with their beloved brothers death. It was decided that to have his vow be broken would place shame upon his name so closest brother to Baalich, a marine by the name of Damcus Valience took up the armour of Baalich and placed it upon his own body. The relic blade and boltgun of Baalich wasplaced in his hands and the helmet that had sent fear into the hearts of many was placed upon his head. Damcus Valience was removed from all records that the chapter held and he would not only take up the cause of his former master, but also the name; making chapter master Baalich Masoon live on and continue to fight the chaos threat
And so throughout their history, when one chapter master dies, the champion takes up the armor of Baalich and continues his oath against chaos. The only people who know of this tradition is the champions former squad brothers and the chapters chaplain, preferring to keep the secret as closely guarded as possible, knowing that if any person corrupted by chaos found out, then the legend of the immortal bane of chaos would be worth
Ps: Chapter master name is a work in progress, I don't like Masoon so that will change over time.
Have added a few traditions and reworked the story a little to make it more believable. It's still not perfect frame work to build on, but is much better than the first.
Last edited by Price; December 29th, 2011 at 20:49. Reason: Edited story/added some traditions
You said the planet was "deserted and inhospitable". If they suddenly found a huge Chaos army sitting on a barren dirt ball they'd just nuke them from orbit. There needs to be something on the planet worth fighting for. Also, if the (fake)Inquisitor just *poof, disappeared* before they actually arrive, that pretty much screams "IT'S A TRAP!"
First, make it a populated world, maybe put something if significant value on the planet. Second, have the (fake)Inquisitor slip away once they're on the surface, then as soon as they notice he's gone.... Blam. Ambush!
That stuff about passing down the name and keeping the oath is gold. Go with that, build on it. That Inquisitor is a traitor and a heretic! He led the chapter into an ambush, got many of your brothers killed and murdered your beloved chapter master. Vendetta! Eternal crusade of vengeance! You've made a big deal out of honour and tradition, you can't let something like that slide.
The bit about the Necrons showing up too seems a bit unnecessary, betrayal and ambush by the arch-enemy sounds like enough by itself. But, if you really want them in it, then give them a better reason for waking up. (ie: freaky warp majiks tare the universe a new space-hole or someone gets a bit nuke-happy and devastates a continent.) Just having them wake up right then for no particular reason is a bit weak.
Since you've set them up as watchmen looking over the Eye might I suggest you make them part of the Astartes Praeses , this would fit in well with what you've already done and give you some frame work for future fluff.
The Orks stealing their stuff and them launching a crusade to get it back could work, but you'd have to give them some personal history for it to make sense. Sort of like a Yarrick/Thraka thing. Orks looting stuff is one thing, Orks keeping a suit of power armour to troll a Spacemarine chapter is another. Maybe the chapter has fought this warboss several times, maybe stopped a few Whaaaggs!! Had a few losses, a bit of back and forth. Enough for a full on bromance between the chapter and the warboss, causing the chapter to become his favourite enemy.
The warboss "Luvz dem humiz! Dey alway put up deh best fight!"
Hope I was of some help, look forward to hearing more about them.
In the 41st millenium there is no such thing as paranoia, the universe realy is out to get you!
I like the main idea a lot - the notion of "inheriting" the chapter master title and carrying on his crusade. As SkyDog says, it suggests a chapter big on tradition and on grudges. To that end, some traditions other than assuming the chapter master's mantle might be good.
As far as that goes itself, it's great, but could do with a bit more detail. Is this succession process known outside and/or inside the chapter? Is it a chapter secret, or known only to an inner circle within it? If so, what form does this organisation take? Are they the 1st company, a particular battle barge, chosen by lot etc. Exactly how this works will clarify a lot about how the chapter and the Imperium at large view the Ballichite succession.
Seconded on the weirdness of the Necrons showing up and then not doing anything. They need some other way to get off the planet. Or, playing again on the honour thing, the leader of the host challenges Baalich to a duel, and Baalich kills him but is wounded in the process, and the traitorous inquisitor administers the coup de gras while Baalich is being tended to. This allows the chapter to win the day without need for weird deus ex machina stuff.
Thanks for the feedback guys, really appreciate it.
I know the Necrons were a little random and they were a last minute addition as I felt that with the Chaos forces able to overwhelm the main chapter forces, it'd be easier for them to destroy what remained, even more so without the chapter master. I did toy with the idea of the reinforcements coming sooner rather than the Necrons, so may go with that instead.
Traits and traditions of the chapter will be posted some time in the next hour and will hopefully give them much more depth and flavor allowing an easier understanding of them.
And thank you for the link to Astartes Praeses! After reading what was there, a few things have popped into my head for the future so that will be fun once the basic background story is all sorted
Thanks for the input guys
I like the edited fluff alot, and the way brothers progress as a squad is how i always invisioned it when i had a marine chapter. i don't love the wording of, "despite horrendous wounds that would have slew even the mightiest marine." since he is by all accounts the mightiest marine within the chapter, it seems like a contradiction to say that, i would say something more like, "despite horrendous wounds that would kill the average marine several times over". i know it seems hyperbolic, but using an 'average' marine as the point of comparison sounds better to me, but this is just my opinion of course.
love the grudge anti chaos stuff, also burn that heretic inquisitor!
Yeah, it's how I've always seen it too. I made a point of modeling all my squads with something unique on each squads base to try and put that onto the tabletop.
I like your wording better and will change it accordingly.
Thanks for the input
Since the last update I have had the gears in my mind turning and have just started writing up the first full draft of the fluff
I have music, tea and models in front of me so will hopefully have it posted within the next few hours.
Edit: So the draft won't be up for a few days, I've not written anything for a long time, so it isn't as good and doesn't flow as well as I'd liked it too. But! I have added up a paragraph about the Cetari Frater company that is going to be my main army to play.
As always C/C welcomed.
Last edited by Price; December 29th, 2011 at 20:52.