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I saw a WD and really liked the Black Dragons appearance and fluff, but failed to realize that they were actually from the Salamanders chapter. I had been using Black Temlpars. The result is that I now have a chapter with Red Shoulder pads, blak armor, adn gold trim, jump-pack and CC heavy (and you expect me to swap them for SALAMANDERS!!!! So this is my fluff to change all of this.
Ever since the Black Templar chapter had been formed, they headed out to hunt down problem areas in the galaxy. One particular company of Templars excelled at this tactics.
Early in the Planet Killer crusade they were placed on the penal world of Mace IX. They stayed here and put down the local rebellion, (which had earlier been eating gaurdsman for lunch) and then the planet killer came in system. It wiped out all telepathic communication, and the Black Templar chapter was dispatched to lend aid. The small little company on Mace was forgoten entirely, for the duration of the campaign.
Over the months of isolation on the empty world, some of the marines lost faith and turned on their fellow marines. Mace was plunged again into battle as marine fought marine.
Finally the loyal marines prevailed, and the planet killer's reign of terror came to an end. The chapter returned and collected theri brothers from Mace. The Inquisition looked into the case of the incursion on Mace IX, and deemed that the entire company should be put to death. Fortunately, a single wise Inquisitor pointed out that there was no Chaos taint within the blood of the survivors, and that it would be wasteful to destroy so many geneseeds. Instead, the company was exiled to the feral world of Draconis to await final verdict. The company would remain under the watchful eye of the Black Templars.
The crestfallen company was left on Draconis, adn moved to the shelter of the mountains. Food was scarce, and there were many hardships, but such are the rigours of exile.
It was not long before the deprivation began to tell on the company. Theri geneseed became mutated. They grew long fangs, barbs on their forearms, and regained some of the lost abilities of the space marine. They could spit venom, and their altered throats made roars and growls possible. It is not understood why the Templars allowed this to happen, but when the company came again under the eye of the Inquisitor, it was deemed that they were too impure to be accepted back into teh chapter, and must instead form their own.
The marines did this, naming themselves the Dragons, after the alterations, and mountainous lifestyle. They began to recruit more marines into their numbers, and incorporated the native religion into tehri own. They spread far and wide and prospered in the arts of war. Huge catle monasteries were made in the mountains, interconnected by miles of bridges and valleys. They had many allies abroad, and their chapter master Gillead, whom they viewed as Primarch, was a good and merciful man.
This golden age was not to last though. While in a battle agaisnst the foul Xenos Orks, Gillead and his command were taking theri turn at patrol, leading at all times by example. Late in the night gunshots were heard over the ridge. The chapter swiftly mobilized some fo its best men and rushed to aid. They found their beloved Master lying flat in the mud, the chapter standard bearer had been slain, the eight-pointed mark of chaos duabbed on his chest in mud, the banner torn off and burned. One of the marines found that Gilead was still alive and bent close to hear the man's dying words. He related how their veteran sergenat Dante had betrayed them. The men were instantly thown into turmoil as the witchhunts started anew.
Thos loyal to chaos were quick to point out the innocent as heretics, and many loyal men fell alongside the untrue. At last the men of Chaos deemed it time to rebel openly. They launched a massive attack on the Keeps, and the mountains reeked of blood. Again, the loyal marines prevailed, and all the heretics had been killed. The body of Dante though, was not found. He had escaped justice.
Thrust once more into the Dark Age, the Dragon became hermits, ruling over their mountain domain with a fist of lead. They posted sentries to gaurd the entrances to every Keep, and barred all save their own entrance. They painted their shoulder pads bloody red, to remind them cosntantly of their duty to wipe clean their reputations, and to never forget their losses. They became cold and hard to the outside world, like Iron. They employed dozens of chaplains to help purify their ranks, adn every winter they stand in the snow, naked to the waist and undergo trial by the Inquistion. Iron dragons also dip their purity seals in the blood fo theri fallen comrades, a final reminder that even great deeds come at a price.
It is rumored that this exile drove the men insane. They claim that there is a Greater Dragon, who is equal to teh Emperor in all ways, and that the two are related. This Greater Dragon spawned mayn lesser sons, each who guards a portion of life, and every Keep is devoted to one fo these dragon. Inside every marine lived the son of one of these dragon, who can converse with, adn lend power to, the marine host. The inquistion still has not found sufficient proof to execute the marines for heresy, but still, no loyal servant of the Emperor enters theri chapter home without a full retinue of the best warriors at his side.
Very Interesting, the only thing that struck me as odd is that the Inquistion let them form their own chapter, if the Inquistion said that they were to mutated to be brought bnack into the chapter then it is more likely that they would be destroyed utterly instead of being told to form their own. You might change that to the Black Templars judging them to mutated to join their chapter again and the BT's were given orders by the Inquistion not to destroy them.
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The inquistion has more than enough proof to make the Iron Dragons Excommunicate Tratoris right here.It was not long before the deprivation began to tell on the company. Theri geneseed became mutated. They grew long fangs, barbs on their forearms, and regained some of the lost abilities of the space marine. They could spit venom, and their altered throats made roars and growls possible. It is not understood why the Templars allowed this to happen, but when the company came again under the eye of the Inquisitor, it was deemed that they were too impure to be accepted back into teh chapter, and must instead form their own.
1) No mutation of gene-seed is acceptable. That's why the Big 'I' is after the Blood Angels for our little...... intricacies.
2) The inability to spit venom is just a descendant of Dorn thing. Other chapters have other parts of the Marine anatomy that don't work, and at least you're keeping it true to the sons of Dorn motif (Imp. Fists to Templars to your chapter).
3) As I stated in number 1, mutated geneseed is unacceptable. No impurities of any kind are allowed. You're lucky they didn't just rain exterminatus down on the planet. The Inquistors wouldn't allow them to survive a second transgression of faith (meaning the the second upheaval in the ranks) let alone a first. Why do you think the Dark Angels keep their mouths shut?
4) Other than that, it's pretty good and tight.
"They are my space marines and they shall know no fear, for they are fear incarnate." ~ Konrad Curze (Night Haunter), Primarch of the Night Lords Legion
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Ave Dominus Nox" (So die the slaves of the False Emperor. Hail to the Lord of the Night.) ~ Talonmaster Zso Sahaal [Lord of the Night, p.68]