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    [preface]Please read this and let me know if I majorly screwed up fluff anywhere. I want to adhere to the universe already set in place and not try to rewrite history. I have done my homework (so to say) and would like you to grade me. After reading this, please do not hesitate to remark!

    Thanks in advance, and enjoy!!![/preface]


    + + + MECHANICUS CYPHER ALPHA-IOTA ACCEPTED - GREETINGS.TECHPRIEST MALIK+ + +
    + + + MECHANICUS CYPHER ALPHA-IOTA ACCEPTED - GREETINGS.TECHPRIEST MALIK+ + +
    + + + FILE ORDER ACCEPTED - SEARCHING FOR SERVANTS OF THE DEUS MECHANICUS… + + +
    + + + ... ... ...+ + +
    + + + …NOT FOUND - ROUTING TO ZEALOTS OF THE OMNISSIAH [M37]+ + +
    + + + FILE ORDER ACCEPTED - SEARCHING FOR ZEALOTS OF THE OMNISSIAH [M37]+ + +
    + + + FOUND – DATA INCOMING+ + +
    + + + DATA RETRIEVED - FOR YOUR EYES ONLY+ + +

    Chapter Name: Zealots of the Omnissiah

    Designation: Loyalist

    Founding Date: Late M36; post Chief Artisan Tilius’ Discovery of STC’s

    Codex Adherence Level: Divergent
    (Scions of Mars, Honor Your Wargear)

    Primarch: [+++CONFIDENTIAL - UNAUTHORIZED+++]

    Homeworld: Silicona VII (Forge World) in the Indux System

    Symbol: Omega surrounding Cult Mechanicus Icon (they don the Adeptus Mechanicus Red in reverence as well) [see my forum icon]

    Warcry: “Venustus et divitae absisto, tantum gnaritas eduro!�
    [Translation] “Beauty and wealth fade away, only knowledge persists!�

    + + + PURPOSE + + +
    The Zealots of the Omnissiah (Omnissiah Devotio) were created to stem the Cult Mechanicus’ desires to further their knowledge through the recovery of STC’s (Standard Template Constructs) as well as other ancient and lost data. They are faithful allies of the techpriests and techmagi of the Cult Mechanicus. As such their main purpose is to seek out and recover all traces of lost knowledge and mysterious information (through whatever means necessary). Their secondary purpose is to destroy those ignorant enough to oppose them and the spirits of warfare residing in their weaponry and armor.

    + + + FOUNDING + + +
    The earliest known records of the chapter date back to a period around mid to late M36. [+++CONFIDENTIAL - UNAUTHORIZED+++] No specific date is known; only a vague timeline of their existence. It is highly unlikely the Cult Mechanicus will be willing to part with such data.

    + + + LOCATION + + +
    The Zealots of the Omnissiah are found scattered across the known universe, as well as charting into the unknown. They travel from planet to planet in search of lost and arcane knowledge. They are guided by a Ducis (Duke) to new areas where purportedly vanished and unfathomable knowledge exists. [+++current Ducis: Brother Zachariah+++] They primarily operate out of battlecruisers and function similar to the Black Templar [+++cross reference available+++] methodology. They are stationed in this manner so any rumor of STC’s or libraries of ancient information may be thoroughly investigated in the shortest amount of time possible. Their homebase of operations is the 7th planet in the Indux system; an ex-Forge World known as Silicona.

    + + + HOMEWORLD + + +
    Originally founded and intended to remain on Mars, the Servants had to be moved offworld. The purpose behind this move has been speculated on, but ultimately it was announced they were moved due to the lack of precious land on Mars. A suitable planet was sought out and, after it had been found, the Zealots were transplanted. They were subsequently moved to a backwater system, known only by the Adepts of Mars, called the Indux system, on the 7th planet (an ex-Forge World) known on Mars as Silicona.

    Silicona has three unnamed moons which orbit it (denoted only by their colors, they are nicked Rufus, Croceus and Viridis).

    I. Rufus is a vast jungle-like moon, uninhabitable due to its toxic atmosphere and uncharted due to its thick plant growth (which gives it its ruddy color from afar). The atmosphere seems to be generated from the strange plantlife residing on the moon. This “plantlife� has sentience, which fascinates many of the Zealots. Some of the more daring have even ventured there to study the biology and botany, in order to advance their knowledge of “such wonderful plantlife�. Through these studes more than one zealot has reported the odd occurrence, and the moon has had a note put in with the Inquisition about virus bombing and/or exterminata. Its toxicity is so harsh that even the hardy space marines can only spend a few hours in it. This has limited their ability to study the plant life in depth.

    II. Croceus is a planar moon. It has no defining features, and no humans reside there. It is habitable, but deadly creatures known as the Pondu roam the plains. They are scattered solitude creatures, which only come together during mating season, or to fight over prey. Typically large and cumbersome, the omnivorous beings are as lethal as they are swift - when they wish to be. Many attempts have been made at domesticating the beasts for use as steeds in the Zealots ranks. All attempts have been futile thus far. During certain days of the year the Pondu’ mysteriously dine on fresh meat. The smaller herbivore creatures, the Ferula, tend to be the brunt of this odd ritual. During the few days a year in which the Pondu’ dine on flesh, Zealots will send scout marines and green sergeants to kill the massive beasts. The experience gained by the troops is invaluable, as the foe they are facing is large, yet fast and fatal. The meat from the Pondu’ is only used in a ritualistic “right of passage�. The lard is boiled because it is an excellent source of oil for the machinery. The skin is used as leathers for the population of Silicona. The bone is used to adorn some of the marines weapons, be it bolter, axe, or sword. The Pondu’ only have one natural predator: old age. They live to be approximately 14 Siliconian years old, unless premature death takes them be it Space Marine, disease or challenging another Pondu for territory. Aside from the Pondu and the Ferula, very few creatures reside on Croceus.

    III. Viridis has no atmosphere, and is uninhabited. It is a rocky wasteland to say the least. Many meteors have ended their passage through space on its surface. Viridis is used as a no-atmosphere war-game battleground for training squads of marines. It is also used as a means of training Scouts prior to the final implants. Drop-pod (tactical, assault and Terminator) squadrons also perform drops to increase their resistance to ‘pod-vertigo’. This mock-battlefield is used to train the marines to orient themselves to any situation and to reinforce their reliance upon the Omnissiah for protection from any element.

    Silicona III, IV, and VII have provided the Adeptus Mechanicus with many skitarii initiates in the past. The exceptionally intellectual humans that had resided on Silicona VII sought understanding more than “naive pleasures�, and were chosen to be skitarii initiates. Considered by Mars to be no longer fit to recruit Skitarii from, it was an honor and blessing to the local population when the Zealots were moved to Silicona VII. The Cult Mechanicus made mention to the Ducis at that time that the people were of an intellect surpassing most humans. They strove for perfection which pleased the Ducis. The Zealots who remained on Silicona VII provided protection for them and in return the Siliconians would some day provide a means for the Servants to recruit from. Through the millennia since the Zealots inhabited the planet, it has been restored to some of its original glory. No longer a full-fledged Forge World, the planet has been transformed into something of a mini-Forge World. One whom’s sole production is to feed the instruments of death the Zealots wield. There are no longer any local inhabitants, and so the Zealots of the Omissiah recruit planet-to-planet as need be.

    After the Adeptes Astartes landed on Silicona, it was slowly transformed into something similar to a Forge world, albeit not to the production extents such a place follows. The local population was moved offworld and granted estates and land on Silocona I, III and IX. After being restored (if you can call it that) into a Forge World, it was deemed the planet would be used for prototypical experiments via the Adeptus Mechanicus of Mars as well as supply the Zealots with weaponry and armour. The Ducis and his chosen Zealots of the Omnissiah would remain and intermingle with the Techpriests of the Adeptus Mechanicus to keep their skills honed.

    The Zealots still recruit locally (within the system) to help fill their ranks, but with the chapter being spread out so far they have been forced to recruit on a planet-to-planet basis as they see fit. They share tidbits of their vast knowledge with select “locals� and in return monitor the brightest individuals for consideration into the chapter. Still, there is an innate yearning for knowledge that the people of the Indux System exhibit. Therefore only local Induxians are allowed to train in the secretive ways of the Zealots’ Techmagi, and only they are allowed to become Techmarines within the chapter (barring a total loss of Techmarines, which would basically mean total annihilation of the chapter).

    The Ducis and his personal retinue of Techpriests and Techmagi reside in the fortress-monastery Moenia. It sits in the midst of the once-grand metropolis of Augmentus, and allows the Ducis to oversee War Ttitan research, heavy armour (tanks) development and precious mineral refinement. The only other inhabitants of Moenia are the HQ staff of the Zealots, the new local recruits, and Essedarius. [+++INFORMATION FORTHCOMING+++] The remainder of the chapter is off fighting to the four corners of the universe.

    + + + ESSIDARIUS + + +
    The Zealots of the Omnissiah hail Jakub Landau as their Valde Ducis; he is venerated and revered as though he were a disciple of the Deus Mechanicus’ and progeny of the Omnissiah. What is known of his legacy is scant, but the brethren have his story memorized.
    + + +ESSEDARIUS STORY: AS RECALLED BY BROTHER TECHMARINE KAIS OF THE ZEALOTS OF THE OMNISSIAH+ + +
    + + +BEGIN VOX PLAYBACK+ + +

    Nothing is known of his childhood, but at the tender age of 8 Jakub Landau was taken from his home world [+++CONFIDENTIAL – UNAUTHORIZED+++] and placed in the Battle School of the Collegia Titanica. Jakub survived the rigors of battle titan school. In fact, not only did he survive the training, he excelled at piloting the adamantium goliaths. So much so, that the adepts of the Cult Mechanicus took notice of him. His love of the machines inspired them with hope. His mental connection with the machine spirits and quick adaptation earned him the name of Essedarius (one who fights from a chariot) from his fellow classmates. All of this heaped upon a boy of 14 Terran years!!!

    Prior to graduation of the Collegia Titanica, he was confronted by a Techpriest one evening and given a package. In the package was a miniature vox-com. Finding the behavior of the Techpriest odd, he decided to play along. He put the vox-com microbead in his ear, and then proceeded to follow the voice on the end of the connection until he was sure he was thoroughly lost. The voice had a raspy metallic tone to it, and the speech pattern reminded him of those in the Titan simulators. Looking up he discovered he was standing in front of a dimly-lit munitions storehouse. Walking through the massive plasteel doors, he found himself standing before a group of cloaked figures. They thanked him for his time, and told him if he accepted their upcoming offer they could promise him the ability to converse with machine spirits til his heart was content. Essedarious inquired as to what the offer was. He was reassured the offer would be more than he could ever dream of. They told him he would be a prototype for a new style of warrior; a warrior of the Techpriests. As the dim lights slowly brightened, he gasped, his jaw dropping. Stunned, he immediately bowed to one knee in reverence of who he now gathered were members of the Cult Mechanicus. He accepted the offer without hesitation. A motion was made, and the date was inscribed into the log the Techpriest was carrying. Essedarius’ acceptance of the offer pleased the Fabricator General whose hands filled the deep pockets for such an experiment. Men with power are allowed to toy with “the rules� on occasion, and this was one of “those� occasions.

    Essedarius was immediately taken to a ship and flown to Mars. On the way he was briefed on the order of events that were to precede a new chapter of space marines. He was told that the findings by Chief Artisan Tilius had reassured the Cult Mechanicus that STC’s were yet recoverable. He still could not believe his ears and eyes. Was he dreaming? Was this all really happening? He was told he would undergo the rigors of becoming a space marine. Hailed as having the potential to be a great titan pilot, and now the opportunity to be a space marine - what more could a man ask for!?

    Essedarius hails from the once-renowned geneseed of [+++CONFIDENTIAL – UNAUTHORIZED+++]. If that is really the contributor, we brethren are not sure. The answer has been shrouded in mystery for many centuries. It has been the only point of contention amongst us. All we know is that the geneseed was carefully monitored and selected by the adepts of Mars specifically for this experiment. Essedarius was the sole surviver out of 100 prototypes. The cost was enormous, but the Techmagi were willing to try until success. Nonetheless, he DID survive the ordeal, and was declared the first of the Servants of the Deus Mechanicus (later renamed the Zealots of the Omnissiah due to our “fanatic� worship of the Machine God). He was immediately put through the thorough training of the Techpriests, to make him a Techmarine. He was indoctrinated with the rights of activation, the maintenance and knowledge needed to call forth the raging energies and war spirits of the machines he was to lead into battle. He instantly connected with said machines. It seemed to him his battle titan training had prepared him for this. He spoke with the spirits, and at times seemed to walk amongst them. On more than one occasion he was noted as speaking out loud to the spirits residing within the tanks, weapons, and armours. Some remark this as all hearsay, but we know it is true. We have been granted this wondrous ability, every one of us, be it the smallest inkling. Essedarius was granted the title Valde Ducis (Great duke) and given command of the Servants of the Omnissiah. He was now a skilled titan pilot, “angel of death� and techpriest, a god in his own right. [+++COMMENTS NOTED & INQUISITORIAL REVIEW PENDING+++]

    Essedarius was given access to all the Techpriests had to offer: money, machines, weaponry, and armor. Whatever he wished was at his fingetips. He chose knowledge. Being his faithful, we followed suit. We trained in the ways of the mechanicus. We have learned how to unlock the spirits within our own weaponry, and speak to our machines. We learned the litanies associated with blessing of our machines’ spirits. Every last one of us reveres our machines higher than ourselves. Thank the Omnissiah for our protection and thank the spirits for our lives.

    Essedarius led many expeditions into uncharted areas in search of STC’s and the priceless knowledge they contain - until THAT fateful day. It is a day we Zealots generally do not speak of. Yet, I feel compelled to do so now.

    Essedarius’ force was on one of the many yet named planets near the “veiled region� in the Segmentum Tempestus. They were in the process of an STC follow up when he and his marines were trapped in the midst of an Ork Waaagh! Two warring clans’ enmity had finally come to a head. As fate had it, our brethren and our beloved were unexpectedly caught in the middle of the chaotic battle. While attempting to reach a suitable location to be transported off-planet, he and his marines were pressed into battle, fighting for their lives as both war clans fell upon them. Greenskin fought greenskin. Greenskin battled Space Marine. It was brutal close quarter fighting, and the wave of the jade ocean was endless. As his men started to fall victim to the green-skinned bastards, he noticed an Ork warboss. His name is unimportant, for why should the filthy beasts have names? Do you name the rats in the sewers, or the carrion feasting on corpses? I digress. This same warboss headed in Essidarius’ direction. Feeling no remorse for the twisted mass of flesh and steel, the abomination of xenos and machine, he charged directly for the warboss, shrugging off blow after blow, leaving a trail of green bodies in his wake. He clashed with the warboss and they fought in bloody and brutal hand-to-hand combat, trading blows and dodging incoming attacks. The Omnissiah blessed his every move, and he was able to hold off the warboss and some of his minions long enough to permit a thunderhawk gunship to enter sub-space and near the surviving members. Those fighting near him were encouraged by Essidarius’ display or honor, and were motivated by his ceaseless chanting. They made their way to the Thunderhawk unscathed.

    As the brothers loaded into the Thunderhawk, Essedarius glanced away from the enemy to assure himself his zealots would survive. The last man entered the ship, and turning to see where the Valde Ducis was, presuming him to be close behind, saw the most horrifying of sights. The warboss struck a mortal blow to Essedarius, nearly ripping him asunder. He plummeted to the ground much like a sack of Pondu scales held at arms length, and then released only to allow gravity its revenge. With screams comparative to those of the vile Eldar Banshees, and tears streaming from their mystical eyes, the Zealots poured out of the gunship slaughtering Orks by the dozens, carving a path back to Essedarius. Finally arriving at his side, the Brother-apothecary Bart noted he was yet alive. Bless the Omnissiah! Bless the Machine God! Zealots fought to maintain a clearing around the Valde Ducis. Brother Bart chanted a blessing to the phantoms of his armour, and a benediction of the Omnissiah for Essedarius grand fortune. For, it was the Omnissiah who protected Essidarius’ soul and his resident machine spirits whom protected his armor.

    Sadly, Essedarius’ body was broken, yet his spirit lived on. He survived the long ordeal back to Silicona VII. Some say the spirit of Essedarius perseveres in each Zealot. The truth is, his body sleeps well beneath Moenia where he may one day be again called to war as the only Dreadnought in this glorious chapter. Hail the Omnissiah!

    Since Essedarius’ fall, there have been 9 successor Ducis’ (none other dare claim to be Valde Ducis in reverence of him). The current successor is Ducis Zachariah, an intellectual genius by any normal man’s standards. He is calm, mild mannered and respected (to say the least) by all of us.

    Hail the Omnissiah! Praise the Deus Mechanicus!
    + + +END VOX RECORDING+ + +

    + + +CHAPTER ORGANIZATION+ + +
    Zealots of the Omnissiah do not follow traditional Codex Astartes chapter adherence. The headquarters staff typically stays on Silicona VII while the rest of the Zealots are spread across the galaxy. There are only 6 “companies�, 5 of which reside on Mechanicus gargantuan battlecruisers seeking out STC’s and other some such ancient information. They can frequently be seen fighting side-by-side with Skitarii, whom they have grown fond of.

    The first company is made up of Terminators and Veterans with Terminator Honors. Fifteen squads in total, three squads from the first company marines are sent with each of the 5 battlecruisers as veteran support. Veterans with Terminator honors frequently lead squads in order to train up-and-coming sergeants. Those Veterans who have Terminator armour assigned to them rarely take to the battlefield, but when they do enemies of the Imperium beware!

    Each company is one and a half times the size of a codex company, and incorporates the specialties inherent to the Zealots. Each company is led by a Techmarine and a Chaplain. Each company contains 15 squads (6 tactical Squads, 4 Devestator Squads, 3 Assault Squads, and 2 Scout Squads) and associated vehicles and wargear. Bikes and Landspeeders are rare and therefore revered as holy and sacred vehicles. Zealot Devestator squads are trained in the arts of forward advance, and typically find themselves traveling in front of the main forces.

    + + +COMBAT HISTORY+ + +
    Due to their mysterious nature and constantly unknown whereabouts, the Zealots have participated in many major engagements since their founding. No record exists of their participation in such battles. As far as anyone need be concerned they don’t exist. They operate in-cognito from the rest of the chapters. More than once they have been fired upon by their Astartes brethren, not realizing the Zealots were allies, but mistaking them for one of the Chaos legions due their incessant chanting. The Zealots have accepted the role and quickly withdraw from fighting when instances such as these occur.

    Those whom have seen a Zealot remark of how they move almost robotically, executing motions and firing with machine-like precision. Still substantially controlled by the Cult Mechanicus, the preservation of knowledge comes first and foremost. Therefore, while other chapters rage in battle, the Zealots will seek out lost knowledge and treasure helping whenever need presents itself. Many a warrior, be it guardsman or marine, has witnessed odd-moving figures donning the symbol of the Adeptus Mechanicus bafflingly appear and repair their Leman Russ, Land Raider, etc - only to, just as mysteriously, disappear from whence they came chanting and murmuring the entire time. It is widely accepted that they are reciting litanies of praise to the Omnissiah and ritualistic chants to unlock the spirits residing in their machines, weapons, and armour.

    + + +COMBAT DOCTRINE+ + +
    The Zealots of the Machine God find strength and security in their weaponry, armor and machinery. Each Zealot deems his wargear with higher esteem than his own life. After all, the Omnissiah watches over his armor as well as the Golden Throne which maintains his own life. They see the emperor as an intelligent man, whom ascended life by entering a construct so powerful, he has become everlasting – not as a god.

    The Zealots tend to use a mobile firing arrangement, utilizing their weapons and armor as the Deus Mechanicus has seen fit. They rely more on their weaponry than their own personal skills, and as such have honored it by blessings, incenses and oils. Knowledge is the supreme manifestation of divinity; therefore each marine in the chapter hails their Techmarine Ducis (company commanders) as demi-gods, fanatically obeying their every command. All Zealots are taught to chant as they move to unlock the righteous fury of the spirits housed within their weapons and armor as well as to praise the almighty Omnissiah. Zealots have an unending hatred for all things large, green and stinky.

    As mentioned previously, only Induxians are allowed to train to the full extent of a Techmarine, and within the chapter only they have access to the dark and esoteric information provided them by the Techpriests of Mars. The Zealots HQ and Techmarines have been trained extensively in the ways of the Adepts of Mars, and therefore do not need to send inductees off to Mars to be trained as Techmarines. They are trained “in-house� and indoctrinated with the lineage of Essidarius, the rites and rituals of the Cult Mechanicus, and the omniscient Deus Mechanicus.

    During battle Chaplains chant praise to the Omnissiah, litanies of love for Essidarius, and the ritualistic tongues to unlock the diverse spirits and specters of their machines. All Chaplains are trained to be Techmarines, but have since been noted for their passionate and keen reverence to their god, brethren and machinery. Therefore they are granted the ability to preach about the Omnissiah as they see fit. The scarce few whom have had the pleasure of fighting alongside the Zealots consider this behavior to be near-heretical. It is commonplace belief that no mortal should be praised in the same breath as the almighty. The Chaplains are only reassured by these opinions that they are being persecuted for their belief in both the Machine God and their beloved Essidarius, and therefore must try harder!

    Some Zealots are even provided with the training to wield weapons of mass destruction, able to sear enemies steel like flesh and bones like blubber. A highly sought after position, only those most in-tune with the spirits are allowed to wield such anger and malice. They are taught to move swiftly and silently which enables them to gain forward positions. For what good is a marine without his weapon? And what good is a weapon without battle to test its mettle?

    The most fervent Zealots are given the chance to prove themselves worthy of donning jump-packs and two weapons! What more honor could a marine be given than to hold two war-mongering spirits in his hands, and wear the gift of flight on his back? It is widely accepted by Zealots and therefore believed that these assault marines are infused with the ability Essidarius granted them through HIS geneseed (ignoring [+++CONFIDENTIAL – UNAUTHORIZED+++] actual contribution) more so than their brethren. Every marine knows his strengths and weaknesses, and utilizes his brethren to advance the cause. These marines can tap the full potential of their weapons while being distracted by enemies directly in front of them, and are aptly placed in Assault squads.

    + + +LITANIES, CHANTS, RAMBLINGS+ + +
    Below are a few of the discernable chants one may hear when presented with a warring Zealot of the Omnissiah:

    “Venustus et divitae absisto, tantum gnaritas eduro!�
    “Omnissiah contego meus animus et Deus contego meus apparatus.�
    “Fortuno hac bolter, dominus, sis hic contendo prorsus ac inimicusto vitiosis viscus.�
    “Libero ipsemet, laxus tui ira contra et canis’.�

    + + +GOODBYE.TECHPRIEST MALIK+ + +
    + + +END TRANSMISSION+ + +
    + + +CONNECTION CLOSED BY USER+ + +

    SQUAD III OF 2ND COMPANY

    Last edited by Deus Mechanicus; June 10th, 2005 at 13:37. Reason: Added pic of Squad III, 2nd Company
    ~the machine god

    {secretly the machine god plays Tau and CSM ...shhhh...don't tell the adepts!!!}



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    you weren't kidding when you said a long read. all in all it was good. the only complain i have is that for the first bit i wasn't sure if these were marines or adepts of the adeptus mechanicus


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    Quote Originally Posted by 10th Lyran
    you weren't kidding when you said a long read. all in all it was good. the only complain i have is that for the first bit i wasn't sure if these were marines or adepts of the adeptus mechanicus
    I have been working on their storyline now for about a month. About the confusion over them being Adeptus Mechanicus - that was the point. They are a semi-secretive marine force for the Adeptus Mechanicus. I have a pic of some painted minis, but can't figure out how to upload it yet. Working on that.

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    Pics are in my gallery, and HERE IS A LINK TO IT - enjoy!
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    i know, but still. confusion can turn readers away


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    Quote Originally Posted by 10th Lyran
    i know, but still. confusion can turn readers away
    Well, that wasn't the intent of the thread. A couple of other people said they were going to read this when I posted it, and now I haven't heard from them...

    I know it is a long read, but please do read it because I would like to ensure I am not stepping on the toes of the fluffy gods!
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    Now, normally I love Adeptus mechanicus fluff.

    But I can't help feeling you've gone a little too far here.

    My reasoning:

    1. Adeptus Mechanicus tech priests are religious zealots first, pragmatic scientists second.
    2. Space marines and the technology which creates them is sacred to both the Imperial Cult and the Adeptus Mechanicus.

    Meaning, while they could create a chapter of their own if they wished, I really don't see why they would. They already have the military strength of the titan legions, the biggest and best weaponry in the Imperium, and hordes of Skitarii warriors.

    My advice, and it's just advice. Make them less members and more allies of the Adeptus Mechancius (more like the Iron Hands.)

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    Only one problem that hasn't been talked about is that you said that the companies look for STC's. Now this may be wrong so please correct me if I am but I thought that all STC's were lost on Mars? That would really limit the use of your chapter. And those are really good mini's did you hand paint the logo?
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    Quote Originally Posted by The_Giant_Mantis
    Now, normally I love Adeptus mechanicus fluff...But I can't help feeling you've gone a little too far here. My reasoning:
    ok, reading on...
    Quote Originally Posted by The_Giant_Mantis
    1. Adeptus Mechanicus tech priests are religious zealots first, pragmatic scientists second.
    Understood. I did not attempt to violate that with my fluff. If you could point me to the spot where you believe I am doing so, I would appreciate it. Also, please a little more info so I can fix it.
    Quote Originally Posted by The_Giant_Mantis
    2. Space marines and the technology which creates them is sacred to both the Imperial Cult and the Adeptus Mechanicus.
    Again, understood. Did I make it seem as though the technology wasn't as sacred to the IC as the AM? Again, if so, please point me to the spot where you think I am doing so.
    Quote Originally Posted by The_Giant_Mantis
    Meaning, while they could create a chapter of their own if they wished, I really don't see why they would. They already have the military strength of the titan legions, the biggest and best weaponry in the Imperium, and hordes of Skitarii warriors.
    I thought I clearly laid out the purpose for this chapter. the SOLE purpose. Well, here it is again: "The Zealots of the Omnissiah (Omnissiah Devotio) were created to stem the Cult Mechanicus’ desires to further their knowledge through the recovery of STC’s (Standard Template Constructs) and other ancient data."
    Quote Originally Posted by The_Giant_Mantis
    My advice, and it's just advice. Make them less members and more allies of the Adeptus Mechancius (more like the Iron Hands.)
    Noted, and will be changed. Please respond to the questions above so I may alter fluff if need be.
    Quote Originally Posted by Sanctus
    Only one problem that hasn't been talked about is that you said that the companies look for STC's. Now this may be wrong so please correct me if I am but I thought that all STC's were lost on Mars? That would really limit the use of your chapter.
    Well, all the STC's were lost (across the entire universe), and have been assumed by most as destroyed. Please read my response to The_Giant_Mantis for the answer to my chapters purpose. I actually just finished reading Gaunt's Ghosts again last night, and...

    WARNING SPOILER ALERT DO NOT READ IF YOU DON'T LIKE BOOKS BEING SPOILED: Gaunt encounters an STC which created Iron Men. I personally believe more exist in the universe and so I formed a chapter created solely to find them. Of course, they are still "angels of death" and will fight for the emperor when the time comes.

    Please note I originally had planned on calling them the "Zealots of the Deus Mechanicus" but I thought their fervent attitude towards the Machine God would have brought down the wrath of the Inquisition. So I tried to adjust fluff to compensate for that.

    Quote Originally Posted by Sanctus
    And those are really good mini's did you hand paint the logo?
    The mini's weren't painted by me. I wish I could claim the paint as my own handiwork, but alsa I cannot. I am having them done, and yes the chapter symbol is hand painted (except maybe the Adeptus Mechanicus symbol).

    Please respond if you had something to say that I have addressed so far. Thanks again everyone!
    ~the machine god

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    Quote Originally Posted by Sanctus
    Now this may be wrong so please correct me if I am but I thought that all STC's were lost on Mars?
    The STCs were issued to all Humanity at the time of the Stellar Exodus, and so were taken all over the galaxy. Over the years the STCs got destroyed and/or lost, so that now only a few fractured printouts survive.
    But yes, the destruction of the Librarius Omnis during the Heresy was a serious event. Occasional Explorator teams made up of remote-controlled servitors are mounted, but it's basically left to fester.

    Regarding the fluff, it is very well thought out, but I have the same problems as Mantis (as usual), and a few small points.

    Quote Originally Posted by Deus Mechanicus
    Silicona was transformed into a Knight world almost immediately after the Servants arrived
    Slight misuse of terminology; Knight Worlds evolved during the Dark Age of Technology and the Age of Strife (not sure if it's one or both off my head). As the holders of the tech were seen as powerful they formed feudal protectorates over their domains, using war machines. In short, such a culture would not evolve if marines were already present on the world in question.

    Quote Originally Posted by Deus Mechanicus
    The native’s yearning to learn thrills the Techpriests of the Zealots, who are commonly seen in the factories and manufacturing facilites of the planet.
    Forgeworlds are ruled by the Mechanicus. There wouldn't be any natives around apart from the tech-priests' social structure on such worlds. Do you see Mars having an indigenous human population?

    Quote Originally Posted by Deus Mechanicus
    Still, there is something vastly different about the people of the Indux System. Therefore only local Induxians (including Silicona I, III, IV, VII and IX) are allowed to train in the ways of the Techmagi, and only they are allowed to become Techmarines within the chapter..
    What is this "something"? Explain. And from what you've said, the Servants are a crusading chapter; crusading gets kinda difficult when you have to return home to restock on vital members.
    And only Induxians are allowed to be Tech-priests? Try telling that to the other forgeworlds in the galaxy.

    Quote Originally Posted by Deus Mechanicus
    Many speculate it was a pure form of geneseed , carefully chosen by the adepts of Mars specifically for this experiment.
    I doubt (although I may be wrong) that the Magi Biologis could extract the pure organs from various chapters. They may well not be well-versed in their implantation - the process is carried out by the apothecaries of the chapters, and is very ritualised. It is also possible that the perverted implantation process itself atrophies some of the organs.
    Or if by "pure" you mean created whole new geneseed, you're very, very wrong. If the Mechanicus knew how to do that then they wouldn't worry about keeping as large a stock of current chapters' geneseed as they do.

    Quote Originally Posted by Deus Mechanicus
    the abomination of living and machine
    No tech-priest would see such a thing as an abomination. A xenos, yes. But not an abomination. Admittedly the guy in question wasn't a tech-priest, but if he was brought up in the Machine Cult then he would hold the same beliefs.

    Quote Originally Posted by Deus Mechanicus
    Bless the Omnissiah, and bless the Machine God!
    They're the same thing, I thought.

    Quote Originally Posted by Deus Mechanicus
    [+++INQUISITORIAL REVIEW PENDING+++]
    An Inquisitorial review. And yet no-one knows this chapter exists. Clarify this.
    Last edited by Xerxes; May 10th, 2005 at 15:48.

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    Quote Originally Posted by The_Giant_Mantis
    1. Adeptus Mechanicus tech priests are religious zealots first, pragmatic scientists second.
    2. Space marines and the technology which creates them is sacred to both the Imperial Cult and the Adeptus Mechanicus.
    Okay, I wasn't specific enough.. To fill in the blanks.

    Tech priests do not do science. Tech priests practice a religion which contain scientific principles. To them, utilizing technology is part of an elaborate series of rituals, as dependent on spiritual components and religious intentions of the participants as on the technology itself. They don't think outside of the religious box, they don't work out solutions to problems like that, they conduct the rituals the way they've always done them, not because it would be beneficial or practical to use that technology to a different purpose (i.e. finding STCs.)

    And the Skitarii are used to help find STCs.. They accompany the expeditionary fleets, and, as some of the most well equipped forces in the Imperium (marines aside), are likely quite a formidable defence in their right.

    But this is my interpretation, and you're free to yours.

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