Welcome to Librarium Online!
Join our community of 80,000+ members and take part in the number one resource for Warhammer and Warhammer 40K discussion!
Registering gives you full access to take part in discussions, upload pictures, contact other members and search everything!
Part 2 of my fluff
Chapter Master Shan Arbalan
Shan Arbalan is a veteran from many campaigns such as the third war of Armageddon and the battle for Medusa I. He started as a novice who quickly showed signs of a good leader and was assigned as leader of a squad of his fellow novices. He progressed into a squad of full Space Marines after the battle for Medusa I. He rose through the ranks suddenly when his squad’s sergeant died from a wound to the neck while protecting a tribe of the people of Varrius during a Eldar raid on the village for the rare minerals of their Homeworld. He took command of the shocked squad and lead them for revenge murdering hundreds of the vile Eldar. After this he was raised to the actual squad leader, and survived a hundred more battles during which he received a suit of sacred terminator armour forged on the small Forgeworld moon orbiting Varrius, before being risen in rank again to a force commander. After thousands of battles leading his company, the Chaplains and Librarians of the Chapter decided, he would be the successor to the former Chapter Master who had died in the last battle. His armour was reforged into a great work of art utilizing the materials mined from the planet below. This was given to him along with a mighty thunder hammer called Stormhawk on the day he officially became Chapter Master of the Soul Eaters. With Stormhawk he shattered a Howling Banshee Lord skull. He carries the Howling Banshee’s blade as a trophy of his most prized kill of his life so far.
Chaplain Darius Drake
Chaplain Darius Drake is the spiritual leader of the Soul Eaters. His squad contains the marines that do not wish t0 be reassigned to new squads but have the will to follow their leader and sacrifice themselves to protect him for the sake of the chapter. He originally had a jump pack but after he lost half his squad, he went on a rampage pronouncing he was fulfilling the Emperors Will. His jump pack was ripped in two by a Autarch. The Autarch fell immediately after this had happened, its blade split in two causing the shattered pieces of the blade to pummel into the Autarch and Darius. The shrapnel shred the Chaplains second heart. But the Emperors Justice was carried out and the Autarch was slain. The chaplain was glorified afterwards for causing the Eldar to flee after seeing their great leader slain before the eyes. The Autarch's wings were torn off by Darius for a replacement for his jump pack along with the inspiration it gave to his men by reminding them of that glory filled day that he killed the Autarch of the Storm Wind. Techmarine Deus attached these wings to Darius's armour after studying the power mechanisms and grenade launcher that is built into the wings. Such is that Chaplain Darius must always have a jump pack and one type of grenades at least. He can also carry Melta bombs in his wings grenade launcher. Darius called the wings of the Autarch, Hawk's Death.
Capere Calamus-Chief Librarian
Capere Calamus is a Librarian that can control his psychic powers in the most different yet skilful ways. His power comes from the strength of the land around him so his powers are most fire related as this is from the environment he grew up in. His powers include such things as conjuring up fireballs or his unique power of summoning a Fire Dragon used to terrorize the hearts and souls of the enemy. But after he uses this power of summoning a Dragon, he cannot use his powers for a short time so he uses it only at the most desperate times because then he has to rely on his combat skills to keep him alive. Even though his skills are great in the closet of fights he would prefer to be throwing balls of flame and ash at his enemies causing them to melt into smoking piles of ash and slag. His preferred weapon is a axe he received after slaughtering an Exarch of a mighty Fire Dragon squad that had been reeking havoc behind the guarded lines of the camp. The Fire Dragons had destroyed dozens of the Sacred Vehicles of the Chapter until Capere sensed them approaching a Land Raider obviously hoping to destroy the vehicle. The squad had not expected to be assaulted with just what they were using to blow up the vehicles. Fireballs rained from above and missed but then a huge red shape appeared above the shadow lurking on the Land Raider. The shape swooped down upon the squad brutally burning them until the wind swept away their ashes. All that was left of the squad was there weapons and helmets. Capere had walked slowly forward towards the dying Exarch who said "Take my Blade of Fire, you have earned bringer of Flame and Destruction." Capere picked up the Exarch's Axe and bowed to the Exarch. But as he did he realized the Exarch was gone. A great gust of wind had blown the Exarch into the sky and the ashes slowly wafted towards the great volcano above the camp. Capere stood for a moment in silence then walked towards his Rhino.
"Eldar raid on the village for the rare minerals of their Homeworld. "
Unless on e of the minerals included wraithbone I don't think that the Eldar would give a hoot about the minerals. Since this is a Chaos army that I think is still loyal during this bit of the story, the Eldar would have proably seen that they were going to fall. So they attack them because of that. But not the minerals.
Hmmmmmm. Xenos weapons. The Inquistion would be after this chapter in very little time. That could be a good story hook when your chapter turns to chaos.
<(^^)> <(^^<) (>^^)> ^(^^)^ Dance Kirby! Dance!
Couple of things:
1. As pointed out above, xenotech is forbidden to all servants of the Emperor. Perhaps they serve a radical Ordo Xenos seated in a position of power? Perhaps they are persecuted because of a lack of such connections? Or is it a well-kept secret?
2. I seriously doubt any Eldar, no matter how deranged or close to death, would grant a human, however enhanced or skilled, a piece of Eldar technology. Just have him rip it from the corpse like the rest, or from a less arrogant/haughty/self-righteous race.
Otherwise, looks good.
They seem fine, but you are just like everyone else when making their characters, they make them ungodly and "super" marines. Try making them less "godly", they can earn their leadership roles by other means not just by killing a crap load of guys. Try making up flaws in their personas, like for example my wolf lord, Erik Moraki has a lust for killing, never quite grew up from a blood claw, so he goes into bezerk rages now and then and can only be controlled by the Rune Priests.
Erik Moraki's Great Company 16/4/7
Borgut "SBD" GreatStrider's Ogres 6/1/2
An'Gorath's World Eaters 3/0/2
Sigurd GreatFang's Wulfen Host 7/4/3