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Walking around the trenches, he obeyed his superiors. he obeyed his superiors just as he had done for ten years now, none of the orders he had recieved in the last decade had made sense. None of them, they were all whims of a sargeant who knew nothing about the emperor. Unlike himm who had thaught about his holyness for five years before being recruited in the imperial guard.
But what was he doing thinking about his past life?
As he walked around the trenches he felt a sort of pain, a sort of pain you only feel when suddenly changing emotions.
which made perfect sense for him to feel.
Walking on the trenches, feeling the cold air of the morning in his face, with nothing to be afraid of.
As he walked on the trenches he saw a drop of blood fall on the helmet of one of his many fallen comrades, he looked up and saw another one impaled to the wall of the trench by a piece of an artillery unit with a demonic hand still gripping it.
The chaos space marines scratched silliness in their sadism.
They all knew it was all over if the forces of chaos engaged them in close combat.
They engaged them in close combat. horrible close combat a melé in which he lost the last remants of his past life.
what struck him as the "horriblest" of facts was that it wasnt all over. One way or another, they managed to defeat the forces of chaos. And now they had to carry gargantuan scars for the rest of their life.
As he continued his march on the trenches, he stumbled upon something that made him tremble. He saw a holy book, still in the hands of one of the now rotting priests tat had preached its interiors during the hell of battle.
so, what'ya think?
Not that great to be honest very repetative and i kinda got lost in the middle. Also your grammar wasnt great.
On the story still not so good, most civilians dont really know much about the Emperor until they join something. Also their little to no chance of the Guard beating Chaos.
Why do I post so much?
cuz I have an easy job
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I'd have to say that you need more goodies in the middle, like a huge battle frenzy.
Keep it up and you'll come out with something great.
As for now I'd have to say it's not bad.
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