OK
Without changing your list too much i sugest this:
first up the grey hunters are 267 as you dont pay for bolters on the melta or powerfist guys, keep the bolters on the powerfist guys if you like but pistols is better and 2 points cheaper ^^
Dreadnoughts all need extra armour, especialy the flamer using ones so they can get close and flame stuff and do there thing.
Um... Why are both your HQs walking around without squads? o0 ok lets chuck the wolf priest and upgrade one of the flamer dreads to the wolf venerable one and make him HQ. and throw away 1 BC and stick the rune priest in with those.
HQ
Rune Preist - 102
- Frost Blade
- Bolt Pistol
- Frags
Venerable Dreadnought - 173
- Heavy Flamer
- Assault cannon
- Extra armour
- Smoke
Elites
Dreadnought - 130
- Twin Linked Lascannon
- Extra armour
Dreadnought - 120
- Extra armour
- Heavy Flamer
Troops
Grey Hunters (1
- 272
- Power Fist x2
- Meltagun
- Bolters + Close Combat Weapon
Rhino Transport
-Extra armour
Blood Claws (14) - 232 (Without LR Crusader)
- Power Fist x3
Land Raider Crusader Transport
Heavy Support
Land Raider Crusader - 268
- Smoke launchers
Predator Annihilator - 145
- Lascannons
Total: 1432
Not many models but workable and fun
As an extra thought You could drop the anihilator and get another dread or unit.