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Here is my first draft of some of my army fluff. I took some world history and applied it here and added in my own flavor.
Based on the self-proclaimed Duke of Mousillon rumors, and wanting to try something different than the traditional Sylvanian fluff I present some city background stuff and some notes on a few of my more notable characters.
Would love some feedback on continuity errors, additional tie ins, etc. I will be updating this as well as I get more time to fill it out. Enjoy!
Mousillon, the damned city, is situated in the marshy valley of the River Grismerie in the Realm of Bretonnia and is in a deplorable state: over half of the houses are abandoned, wood is rotting and fungus covers the walls. Because of the poor drainage and the swampy nature of the land, the dead are buried above ground, often in fortified mausoleums. The decimation of the population by the Red Pox [IY-2300] has caused these above ground burial chambers to swell in number and the graveyards of Mousillon are now almost larger than the city itself.
It has been over 200 years since the last Duke reigned over Mousillon. Maldred’s treachery in the affair of the False Grail has left Mousillon a forever tainted and cursed place. There are however still citizens in the city. Deposed knights, villains, thieves, and murders wishing to escape justice can be found in startlingly large numbers among the poor and unfortunate peasantry. The descendents of the bloodline of Mousillon rule them with absolute authority. Wearing black armor and draped with once rich purple fabrics, these silent watchers never raise their visors, but are quick to draw blood to settle any and all disturbances.
King Louen "Leoncour" has now ordered an Errantry War to cleanse the city's ruins and to discover the truth about the rumors of a self-appointed Duke. Young Knights Errant from all over Bretonnia now gather outside the city gates preparing themselves for the trials that await them within this city of lost souls. It is no secret that many Bretonnians would love to see Mousillon burned to the ground and destroyed once and for all and many believe the King intends on razing the foul city to the ground.
The truth about Mousillon’s nobility is far graver than anyone realizes. A dark heart lies at the center of the cursed palace; an immortal creature of the night. The Dreadlord Duke of Mousillon is gathering an army and is intent on building a powerbase within the city from which to strike out at the lands of man. Unbeknownst to the knights outside its walls, The Dreadlord Duke has been fortifying the walls of the city, and preparing for the inevitable invasion. A hidden army seethes behind closed doors, and waits under the surface of the swamp for the right time to spill forth unto the enemy.
The Darklord Duke of Mousillon
Clad in ancient armor, the Self-proclaimed Duke arrived in Mousillon on a black carriage in approximately IY 2450 after a series of devastating earthquakes. Rumors contest that he is a demon loosed from the pit of the earth, or the remains of a long buried Lord risen again to harass the living. Knowledge of his existence only leaked beyond the walls of Mousillon in the last year, but the poor residents of the city have known about the darkness that resides in the palace, and dually stayed as clear as possible. He is never seen outside of the palace except on the rare occasion at the dead of night, and always flanked by his Duchess, named by the people as Monique la Noir.
Monique la Noir, Duchess of Mousillon
Draped in a long black dress, and long black hair, Monique la Noir lives up her namesake. Her cold stare and powerful presence is unmistakable. She appeared within the walls of Mousillon shortly after the Darklord Duke and many claim she bears the striking resemblance to a member of the Bretonnian royal line.
The last escort of Pavarron
In IY 2293 the noble born sisters Lurien and Adelaide were sent by the Duke of Pavarron to investigate the appearance of the False Grail within the walls of Mousillon. The emissaries, escorted by a large regimen of La Noblesse D'épée, were trapped inside the walls of Mousillon when the deceit of Maldred and Malfleur was uncovered and the city fell under siege by the new King Gaston’s loyal knights.
Countess Lurien de Pavarron
- The older of the two sisters, Lurien chose her right as noble born to bear the sword. A ferocious fighter and blessed with highly attuned reflexes, no man in the Duchy could match her in single combat. Her reputation, along with her esteemed bloodline granted her the honor of leading the La Noblesse D'épée; a highly trained organization of skilled noble warriors from across Bretonnia. The dressed themselves in purple silks and black armor, the color of Pavarron, after their ferocious patron.
Countess Adelaide de Pavarron
- Skilled in the arts of magic, this fair skinned beauty was sought after by many suitors in Pavarron. Adelaide was sent to the empire to study at the Colleges of Magic as a young girl, and excelled as a student. As she grew older, she seemed to show a much softer and feminine power than her sister Lurien. Relying on subterfuge and wiles instead of skill and swordsmanship, she quickly established herself in the palace machinations as a person not to be trifled with.
Louis d’Artois, Marquis de Mousillon
-An exalted champion on the fields of battle, the deeds and heroism of Louis d’Artois were stuff of legend. Bravely and without thought, he threw himself into battle time and time again protecting his homeland of Artois. He held the prestigious and noble title of standard bearer, and kept its colors flying high while fighting against the hordes of Chaos, Orcs, and Skaven. He finally fell in battle defending against an undead force within the Forest of Arden. Survivors of the skirmish claim he was bested in bloody duel by a pale skinned warrior that moved with unearthly speed. Some even claim to have seen the creature dragging off the body of Louis as it withdrew to the forests of Mousillon.
Corpse-stitch the Foul, Dread Necromancer of Miragliano
-Born as Orazio Vanni in the Tilean city of Miragliano, Corpse-stitch pursued a life of necromancy and necrophilia. Living a dual life as a prominent wealthy business owner by day, and a foul creature stalking the Blighted Swamp by night, he practiced his dark arts and honed his skills with ruthless efficiency. It wasn’t until the summer of IY 2522 when he was forced to flee north from the massive Skaven force that sacked the city that he found his true calling. Moving from city to city, he heard the dark rumors surrounding the city of Mousillon and swiftly made his way by land and sea to the cursed port city. It wasn’t long before his necromantic skills were discovered by the Darklord Duke, and thus a dark accord was made.
Last edited by SRNae; May 15th, 2009 at 17:48.
Sounds good, makes for a good starting force. However, it feels like you quoted the Brettonian book almost for word in your intro, and then presented some basic character outlines. I understand that it can be difficult to write effective fluff for a constantly evolving game/army, but I think you could take some time to sit down and think about what makes your fluff so important and/or interesting. Ask yourself "Why would other people want to read this"?
I think that you've got a lot of potential with your idea of the 'Last Escort'. Start there, and then work to the modern day. Flesh out your story. This is very old, and very detailed, but my own fluff is a similar mix of Breton history and VC flaire. The Blood Prince of Arabya
The only error/warning that I can give is that Mordred rebelled while his original king was still alive (name escapes me). Furthermore, you should explain how Adelaide escaped recruitment into the ranks of the Damsals.
Possible Character Tie-Ins
Aquitaine is home of the infamous 'Red Duke', a proven and powerful Vampire who was defeated and entombed twice, in a massive vault.
Heinrich Kemmler is a fierce and powerful Necromancer who led a devastating winter assault against the Wood Elves of Athel Loren.
Wallach Harkon appears in the Empire and creates the Blood Knights, who are then scattered across the globe to escape the Empire knights.
Duke Merovech is unaffected by the Red Pox (same disease kills Maldred), wounds the king at a feast.
Mordred had a wife, both die from the Pox after the False Grail Dishonor.
The second part is where I started my own thing. Definitely needs some more fleshing out though.
Thanks for the link, I am going to take your advice and fill in a lot more of the blanks with the sisters from Pavarron.
Cheers for the feedback, I haven't done much creative writing since high school, so I imagine it should be fun trying to make something that resembles cohesive thought. haha.