ok, i really have had enough...maybe it was never stressed, but it will be now. We are all here to work as a team, and that we shall do.

Blood God, and Brother Captain fenix, please can you two come up with some diagrams, and fluff concerning the system this is happening in. Blood God you once said you could make our system diagram, so do it. Brother captain fenix, you can then name these planets with him (or get a good few different names) and then start to write their background. Make a few agri worlds, hive worlds etc in the system...you get the idea i believe...

my job at the moment is pretty impossible, so anything that isnt getting done by anyone else, i will try my damndest to get it done...anyone who is struggling i will also try to help...if i have to make this bloody campaign myself i bloody well will.

I want some technical ideas from you all too...i want to know ideas on how to gather the ideas (program names and volunteers) and i also want ideas on signing up the people taking part. I like incubi's idea, so expand on it please. I want some designs for your visual idea incubi. I also want some people to think up scenarios for the campaign, special rules etc.

blackhat, please if your ever reading this for something to do chip in aswell, as you can help alot i think.

im not done yet, but i cant type more at the moment...cold, and i have a very worrying thing on my head <_<

read and comment

i can help you on the visual stuff. I just got a question. What kind of picture can I use for a LO eye of terror campaign lol? I'm kinda stuck

I like your attempt to light a fire to this campaign. We outta get moving before school comes, or this is gonna become slower.

incubi

So my idea didn't go through?


Anyways: School starts tommorrow for me anyways. But, I'll do anything you need done.

Variant Army Lists? Characters? Why rabbits are always colored pink?

incubi....use your imagination...this isnt the eye of terror, therefire you can go mad with it

i want some scenarios inside the campaign too please

Hmm... maybe something like Zarathos, Champion of Malal might come in handy - he appears outta nowhere, only to fight Chaos... and he's here.

I bet that Chaos forces are trying to get their filthy hands on some powerful artifact... gotta stop them!

And, naturally, Necrons... there is a tombworld nearby, and they just got an awakening signal, coming out just in the face of Chaos... and everybody else.

Consider the map completed hopefully by the end of the week, And as for planet manes I got those down pat no prob. Ill get fenix to assist me as well.

Np man
Blood Gods on track

What can I do?

And I really want to know if my big piece of fluff is being used.

Originally posted by Long_Shot@Aug 30 2004, 17:59
What can I do?

And I really want to know if my big piece of fluff is being used.
205227


Well I would apreciate some assistance with fluff for the planets

Heres a few names, Pick one and write fluff on it. I will let you create the atmosphere and geographic descriptions for it

Cyris 4
Tryvanis
Trevan 2
Solarus

Only have 4 planets sofar for the Star chart. if you want send me a PM with some names and Ill pick and choose the best Bro.

Your initiative and help is apreciated

Much Respect Blood God

Tryvanis

This was a small agri-world near the eastern most fringe of the Yidran system. At the initial appearances of Hive Fleet Corsair, this planet was the first to be hit. It was hit hard.

Before the attack, it was a relatively peaceful planet that had the same disputes as many other agri-worlds. It produced grox and other wheats in abundance, and trained a small garrison of Imperial Guard. At the behest of the Inquisition to begin fortifying their system, they began training their troopers harder and teaching them to fight in their landscape.

Said landscape was composed largely of prairies, with the odd forest and mountainous region in there.

They had two weeks before the Tyranids hit. When they did however, it was brutal. Immediately they hit the southern continent, and systematically wiped it out. This did not go over well with the garrisoned Imp. Guard, and they began to mobilize their forces.

In his folly, the commander of the world (Count Stronn Bak) ordered his infantry to stand down, and sent a large armored company. After there were no reports back, and two more major cities fell, a resident Commissar executed Bak for not protecting the Emperor's world as best he could.

He then deployed the infantry, who (Without any set camp) entered and in a feet that would rival Catachans, survived without any supplies, snuck up, and ambushed the out Tyranid defences, slaughtering them instantly. Following that, they continued to use ambush attacks to confuse the Tyranids and keep them pre-occupied long enough for Adeptus Astartes reinforcements to arrive.

Now, Tryvanis is a hotly contested battle-zone. The reason for it's insistence on being held is that the massive ammounts of food could strengthen the Tyranids considerably, and Tryvanis offers an easy platform to launch attacks at Elos IV and Randack VII. Both of these are Forge Worlds, and their destruction would prove a major hinderance to the defender plans.




Voila. Fluff for one planet, and mention of another two.

Very Excellent Fluff, i am duely impressed.

I am the head of fluff behind the planets as well as creating the atmosphere in which we play in. I am presantly making the star chart we will use. I would like to make you my official Fluff writer on the planets if your up to the task. Of course I will work beside you in creating fluff for the planets. We should make at least 2 main cities on each inhabited planet to assist us in making each planet individually different

Blood God asks you, you up to the challenge Long Shot?

I shall see what I can do in terms of background INFO regarding to this campaign. . . . . . . . . .

If you guys need ANYTHING, feel free to contact me.

Well with fluff on these planets we can incorpriate into any campain you set. At least Long Shot and I are getting things done.

This is the background im going to use for the solar system

Example of some planets im going to use. Now I just have to shrink them, change them and incorperate them into the solar system. Give them names, fluff etc...etc

what do you guys think?

The background is pretty nice, but the planets remind me too much of Earth, Venus, Saturn, Uranus, etc. Probably because they are. I recall finding a site with lots of beautifully-drawn sci-fi planets on it. I'll see if I could dig it up and post some of those planets here, with the artist's permission if neccessary.

Originally posted by ascension@Aug 31 2004, 03:18
The background is pretty nice, but the planets remind me too much of Earth, Venus, Saturn, Uranus, etc. Probably because they are. I recall finding a site with lots of beautifully-drawn sci-fi planets on it. I'll see if I could dig it up and post some of those planets here, with the artist's permission if neccessary.
205408


Well the planets are what we call template images, they will be changed as i stated above. But dont post the planets on this forum, im the one you need to get into contact with so email them to me (links only please). I havnt changed the pictures at all yet so those arnt what thier going to look like when im done, not even close. And yes a few are from our solar system, but not most of them!

I'm in for the fluff thing.

And on a note to everyone: As I write fluff, ideas I write make me think, "HEY! That would be awesome in TT!"

So, if it's okay with everyone, I'd also like to tackle the variant army lists (Aside from two of them)

Also, how many (If any) variant lists do we want to do?

variant army lists will be along the same lines as scenarios, which im trying to take care of...so pm me if you want to help with army lists and special rules.

incubi you will be in charge of recruiting and advertising when the time comes

we need people who will help out with generally everything...also we need some technical people to write programs, and keep them going

ok remember blood god whenever planets have a number after them they mean that they were lazy in comming up with names so the entire system of planets will be named like so

SUN) argoth1) argoth2) gas giant ophelia)argoth3) martius)

got it?


wel anyways here is soem fluff for an entire system:

the solarus system:


Sun)


the sun of the solarus system has to be this part of the galaxies strangest sun.
as many queer phenomena occur here. the sun itself follows three seasons that shift with the flow of time. no-one has ever figured out how it works.

season 1)the great awakening: this season is charachterized by a massive burst of sun flares from the carona of the star. these are often very impressive on the planets orbiting them as the increased radiation makes very colorfull aroura like effects on the neighboring planets atmospheres. this take place after the great climax.

season2)the great calm: this is the period where sun flares form solaruses sun calm down for a period of calm. most animals living on the planets sorrounding the star breed during this time as the calm lets many planets rain alot more thus incresing plant life.

season 3)The Great Climax: during this season the sun seems to grow more dormant as it releases far less energy into space. this has a cooling effect on its planets. during this time many animals hibernate as ont he farther away planets snow may take over the entire planet.

these seasons last two earth years apiece (for knowledge)

sun) caronis)

caronis:

caronis is a very inhosbitable planet once valued for survival training employed by adeptus astartes and very brave imperial guard commanders. this planet was once inhabited by some flora many were very small and grew in small cracks in rocks. there was little life on the planet this being small morlike creatures deep under the giant sand dunes. this planet was able to support human life but quickly could'nt as a particularly violent awakening season form the sun threw a giant solar flare at the planet the flare quickly overwhelmed its small magneto-sphere causing the planet to insta fry quickly destroying all life and burning the sand dunes into giant waves of glass.

adeptus astartes: chapters that train here include:the white scars,blood angels,and imperial ravens. they come to train quite rarely and only when schedule perhibits.


sun) caronis) purgatory)

purgatory (1 moon generally bigger in size and has small population living on it too)

this small planet hosts varios life forms many in its small lake like ocean. this planet generally remains unoccupied for reason including lack of water and edible substances. if terraformed this plent could be a very profitable agri-world or small population planet. the rarest life form here is a kind of mountain dragon that does'nt breathe fire but is still very fearsome. this planet is commonly likened to a tundra like forest. this planet warms up into a tropical like place in the awakening and generally slightly cools off in the great climax. there is a small imperial outpost maned by a small imperial guard regiment and a small population.

this world is generally a safe haven and defense could be set up here. in last ditch defence



sun) caronis) purgatory) solarus)

solarus 2 moons very small asteroid like....

this planet was once alot like purgatory until it was futher teraformed. this provided much more water and food.
this planets population is likend to warriors in every aspect as this worlds magneto-sphere was damaged ages ago by some rogue solar flare it is alot weaker then the other planets to the seasons.

before this system was rediscovered by the emperors holy crusade in ages past
the people living here had lived lives with generally advanced technology (this planet has had part of an STC plate recovered by the adeptus mechanicus and is being searched for more.) until a particularly well spoken dictator took over an entire continent he began to fortify his palace awaiting attack by his enemies in the north. (out of fluff note: this planet has had a world war kinda like WW2) he carved an entire mountain into the biggest fortress in the system. Fort Agron. during this he became more and more mad whiel the war progressed. the allies in the north began to get a upper hand and quickly seized control of most of the southern continent and its vital land link to the western continent and the great snowed one at the south pole. they then began to rally for the final attack against Agron. just as the attack began the holy crusade retook the system in the name of the emperor and destroyed completely the entire armies of each. and named the system solarus (previos name has been erased as its name suggests heresy)

fort Agron still stands today as the emperor himself landed upon its massive fort walls in ages past looking at the might of the planet itself.

this fort is open to battles and is alot like gondor from lord of the rings except twice the size.

this planets seasons are summer spring and winter in their respective order.

the last three planets will be fluffed by me in awhile as i gotta get off

and thats my fluff :D (i will add to all there fluff when i get back)


edit:

also purgatory and solarus are forest planets quite srry i forgot to put that in :D

and i dont mean nothing by that blood god so relax :D

heres the rest :D


sun) caronis) purgatory) solarus) kargath)

kargath (28 known moons more being discovered)

a great yellow super gas giant.

this planet itself is nearly unaffected by the suns seasons as its giant magnetosphere protects it and its moons form nearly any intrusion of the the suns radiation.
this planet seen from solaruses surface once every 10 years was worshipped as a god for many years on solarus and his arrival heralded times of triumph or plenty.
the planet itself is composed of a very odd mixture of hydrogen and many other gasses this mixture can be used as rocketfule and the imperium has interest in finding a way to harvest it.

its three major moons are as follows (each named after kargaths servants)

kargath) gremlin) garton) greth)

gremlin

gremlin is quite a large moon almost the size of a medium planet. this planet is very odd as its soil is green in addition to the monstrous jungles on it. although people can live here it is a death world inhabited by poisonous insects (of which the officio assinorium collects some of its many famed poisons from)giant and crazy beasts and wyverns.... wyverns from gremlin are monstrous beasts 75 feet in length from wing to wing. these creatures normally docile are easily provoked and can easily tear through a building or its unlucky inhabitants.

garton

garton is a very odd world of which its history is shrouded in mystery. its sky from its ground is a light glowing green. and it has many giant geysers sending forth giant streams of black acid like water high into its sky to rain back down into small pools of acid which collect into lakes at times. this moon is about the size of caronis (which is relativley medium sized) and is famed for its rugged mountain ranges and its black lakes. this world has few inhabitants as the black acid as it is called is quite like acid and destroys most genetic material on contact. this stuff seems to be protruding from the moons core from some unknown reaction. another odd feature of this moon is many strange ruins suggesting necrontyr activity many odd ages ago.... the best known feature of the planet is a giant obelisk protruding form high atop one of the mountains in the center of a giant caldera this obelisk is coated in pure gold but all attempts to land there have failed as the area is very rugged and the normally smooth cladera ground is full of black acid.

greth

greth is the only moon inhabited of the three giant ones

hosting a giant labratory station and a very small imperial guard regiment this planet is alot like earths primordial and sacred moon.
with no life but a terraformed atmosphere it is a very grey planet with no natural life but a population that is rising has slowly brough in sorrounding species from other worlds causing a small ecosystem to appear.

this planet also has a small hive which the whole population can fit on too in times of need.



sun) caronis) purgatory) solarus) kargath) isus)

the last planet in the system and the coldest.

isus has one moon basically a giant comet cought long ago in its orbit.

isus....this worlds even though it has a relativly small magnetosphere is almost unaffected by the systems suns seasons. as it is quite far from the sun itself.
this planet is known as having a giant underground sea that supposedly contained an adeptus astartes monastery fortress. that many years ago got purged by the inquisition for using daemonic magics. this planets surface is quite inhosbitable with a wind chill factor of -500 below zero this planet is quite cold and is very windy. it has two great mountain ranges that burst out of the ice of its frozen sea. these giant mountain ranges seem to tear out of planets surface like they were a submerged submarine and they broke through the surface and the water splash froze with them. these ranges seems to divdie the wind up into even higher velocities and can blow away even a space marine with ease. the only other land mark on the generally flat ice world is a giant adamantium tower built from the surface to the warm seabed. exactly on top of the space marine monastery fortress. the worlds sea deep under are kept from being frozen by giant volcanoes and many hot springs that come from the planets core. these vents host many forms of life almost equalling solarus in life and variety. with one exception since almost no light reaches isus and let alone gets through the ice these creatures are all blind. using some sort of psychic communication these creatures use it to communicate to others of there species only. another seabed feature is the giant forests of kelp like seaweed. these grow alot almost covering the entire undersea world in kelp. but besides that there is very few more interesting charachteristics.

the fortress monastery has nothing in it but has the tower which reaches outside. this tower is in the mountain range built into the side of one actually.
this monastery is one of the very few places that battles can occur ont his world due to its overwhelming temperature.

and thats the systems fluff :D

tell me if you liked it you think it sucked or whatever :D
i will gladly re-write if i have to

also please feel free to add on this is a group decision and must be well liked to be used in the campaign :D


hope you like the rest :D

the nearer to the sun, the dryer the planet...so we should get some forest worlds, maybe a death world, then farther out have an ice world or two maybe.

we should also have a industrial world, with bunkers and hives and such...

this means we can have city fight battles, jungle battles, and a whole host of other wars on different terrain

So I take it Everyone seems to like te work I have in progress?

And Fenix no disrespect ment but I gave the planets different numbers because a planet with the same name may exist in another solar system!

And yes sometimes Im lazy! But i would apreciate if nobody steps on my toes when it comes to nameing the planets. I have asked for user imput and I hope when you said SUN) argoth1) argoth2) gas giant ophelia)argoth3) martius)
that it was a suggestion and not someone trying to take control.

Just wondering thats all! I want original names, no repeats! But besides that good fluff

I like the names Caronis, Solarus and Purgatory so we will keep them but any future names for planets I would like to be run by me so I know. Remember I have to incorpriate them into the map!

no one will say "we shall have this and this"...they shall say "should we have this"...we work together on this

this is too much for one person, and if we step on each others toes then we have problems. Dont worry fenix i know your not trying to take anything, and are only helping, and for that i am grateful. Your doing a great job, and please dont stop :lol:

but just run stuff by everyone first?

ah ok quite srry but then again i dont really have to apologize :D

i ran it up here for that exact reason and hope that it will help the process of writing fluff out.

also thnx for the criticism guys i can't get better until i know what im worst at :D

also i put the rest of the fluff up hope ya like it :D


and thats my fluff (and rant) :D

BTW, people CANNOT see the War Room still, actually.

They really cannot, I'm not lying. So, don't feel disappointed.

Also, you guys are doing a very, very good job. I'll start on some special rules stuff hopefully soon, until then.

PS - WHY is Phobos a Mod again?????

because he missed having "Power" on the site most likely. He told Blackhat that he wanted to be back as a mod!

PS: Has anyone made any headway other then Us?

Well, I've got three planet ideas I'm hammering out.

One of them is an ice world, but for the life of me I want to keep it from sounding like Valhalla.

Currently, it's kind of turning out to be a kind of Attilan kind of place, as the local IG regiment rides big furred animals that can survive the cold, and the largest source of food is a mammoth like animal.

Originally posted by Long_Shot@Sep 1 2004, 19:27
Well, I've got three planet ideas I'm hammering out.

One of them is an ice world, but for the life of me I want to keep it from sounding like Valhalla.

Currently, it's kind of turning out to be a kind of Attilan kind of place, as the local IG regiment rides big furred animals that can survive the cold, and the largest source of food is a mammoth like animal.
206337


Cool man, sounds like something out of Star wars with the banthas I think they were called :P

well how ya guys like my fluff?

please tell so i can write more :D

but anyways what about the rest of my fluff good?

also long_shot good stuff :D

keep planet and fluff ideas comming we have a schedule :D

I'll get to work on a Death World. I simply love the idea of a jungle planet with killer plants and insects rampaging around swallowing things.

Good we have the death world coverd, Thank you ascension

that fluff was pretty good, I just got lost at a point - too long :P

I like this planet idea, and we could have the scenarios divided up into the different planets. I don't think we should have so many planets to complicate things. We should have a smaller amount so everyone remembers them.

incubi

True. But the idea behind the map could be the same as the SoC.

Players need to colaborate attacks and defenses so the enemy doesn't roll right over them.

that fluff was pretty good, I just got lost at a point - too long
thnx :D


also long shot your idea is horribly appealing but it would make the campaign too long :(

and many people are gonna be back in school soon (i already am :( )
and the new warhammer 40k campaign is gonna start up soon :( so we gotta make this shorter or we gotta make it good enuff for people to want to play it tons :D

All I have to say is

SEE PHOBOS! IM GETTING THINGS DONE!

caronis:

caronis is a very inhosbitable planet once valued for survival training employed by adeptus astartes and very brave imperial guard commanders. this planet was once inhabited by some flora many were very small and grew in small cracks in rocks. there was little life on the planet this being small morlike creatures deep under the giant sand dunes. this planet was able to support human life but quickly could'nt as a particularly violent awakening season form the sun threw a giant solar flare at the planet the flare quickly overwhelmed its small magneto-sphere causing the planet to insta fry quickly destroying all life and burning the sand dunes into giant waves of glass.

---------------------------------------------

Blood Gods revamp
Caronis was once a beuitiful planet briming with life and vegitation. Civilisations grew and fell as any inhabited planet is bound to do. Once valued for survival training employed by adeptus astartes and very brave imperial guard commanders. this planet was able to support human life but quickly could'nt as a particularly violent awakening season form the sun threw a giant solar flare at the planet the flare quickly overwhelmed its small magneto-sphere causing the planet to incinerate the surface quickly destroying all life and burning the planet to the core. All that stands is an eternal desert upon the surface. No life, no vegitation.

Blood gods notes - I liked the fluff but we need a planet that looks like paradise and tear any hopes of it ever returning back to such a state, I believe my addition helps bring that point to fruition
------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

purgatory (1 moon generally bigger in size and has small population living on it too)

this small planet hosts varios life forms many in its small lake like ocean. this planet generally remains unoccupied for reason including lack of water and edible substances. if terraformed this plent could be a very profitable agri-world or small population planet. the rarest life form here is a kind of mountain dragon that does'nt breathe fire but is still very fearsome. this planet is commonly likened to a tundra like forest. this planet warms up into a tropical like place in the awakening and generally slightly cools off in the great climax. there is a small imperial outpost maned by a small imperial guard regiment and a small population.

this world is generally a safe haven and defense could be set up here. in last ditch defence

---------------------------------------------

Blood Gods revamp
this small planet hosts varios life forms many in its small lake like ocean. this planet generally remains unoccupied for reason including lack of water and edible substances. if terraformed this plent could be a very profitable agri-world or small population planet. the rarest life form here is a breed of mountain dragon whos razor sharp claws rend both metal and flesh. Although not sharing its cousins traits of breathing fire it is still very fearsome creature. This planet is commonly likened to a tundra like forest. This planet warms up into a tropical like place in the awakening and generally slightly cools off in the great climax. there is a small imperial outpost maned by a small imperial guard regiment and a small population. Rumors of a small population of intelligent creature have been circling around. but no evidence has been forthcomming to support such an alegation.

this world is generally a safe haven and defense could be set up here. in last ditch defence

Blood Gods noted - Didnt change alot because it was pretty awesome on its own

------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

solarus 2 moons very small asteroid like....

this planet was once alot like purgatory until it was futher teraformed. this provided much more water and food.
this planets population is likend to warriors in every aspect as this worlds magneto-sphere was damaged ages ago by some rogue solar flare it is alot weaker then the other planets to the seasons.

before this system was rediscovered by the emperors holy crusade in ages past
the people living here had lived lives with generally advanced technology (this planet has had part of an STC plate recovered by the adeptus mechanicus and is being searched for more.) until a particularly well spoken dictator took over an entire continent he began to fortify his palace awaiting attack by his enemies in the north. (out of fluff note: this planet has had a world war kinda like WW2) he carved an entire mountain into the biggest fortress in the system. Fort Agron. during this he became more and more mad whiel the war progressed. the allies in the north began to get a upper hand and quickly seized control of most of the southern continent and its vital land link to the western continent and the great snowed one at the south pole. they then began to rally for the final attack against Agron. just as the attack began the holy crusade retook the system in the name of the emperor and destroyed completely the entire armies of each. and named the system solarus (previos name has been erased as its name suggests heresy)

fort Agron still stands today as the emperor himself landed upon its massive fort walls in ages past looking at the might of the planet itself.

this fort is open to battles and is alot like gondor from lord of the rings except twice the size.

Bloodgods notes - Absolutly perfect bro, nice job

------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

kargath (28 known moons more being discovered)

a great yellow super gas giant.

this planet itself is nearly unaffected by the suns seasons as its giant magnetosphere protects it and its moons form nearly any intrusion of the the suns radiation.
this planet seen from solaruses surface once every 10 years was worshipped as a god for many years on solarus and his arrival heralded times of triumph or plenty.
the planet itself is composed of a very odd mixture of hydrogen and many other gasses this mixture can be used as rocketfule and the imperium has interest in finding a way to harvest it.

its three major moons are as follows (each named after kargaths servants)

gremlin

gremlin is quite a large moon almost the size of a medium planet. this planet is very odd as its soil is green in addition to the monstrous jungles on it. although people can live here it is a death world inhabited by poisonous insects (of which the officio assinorium collects some of its many famed poisons from)giant and crazy beasts and wyverns.... wyverns from gremlin are monstrous beasts 75 feet in length from wing to wing. these creatures normally docile are easily provoked and can easily tear through a building or its unlucky inhabitants.

garton

garton is a very odd world of which its history is shrouded in mystery. its sky from its ground is a light glowing green. and it has many giant geysers sending forth giant streams of black acid like water high into its sky to rain back down into small pools of acid which collect into lakes at times. this moon is about the size of caronis (which is relativley medium sized) and is famed for its rugged mountain ranges and its black lakes. this world has few inhabitants as the black acid as it is called is quite like acid and destroys most genetic material on contact. this stuff seems to be protruding from the moons core from some unknown reaction. another odd feature of this moon is many strange ruins suggesting necrontyr activity many odd ages ago.... the best known feature of the planet is a giant obelisk protruding form high atop one of the mountains in the center of a giant caldera this obelisk is coated in pure gold but all attempts to land there have failed as the area is very rugged and the normally smooth cladera ground is full of black acid.

greth

greth is the only moon inhabited of the three giant ones

hosting a giant labratory station and a very small imperial guard regiment this planet is alot like earths primordial and sacred moon.
with no life but a terraformed atmosphere it is a very grey planet with no natural life but a population that is rising has slowly brough in sorrounding species from other worlds causing a small ecosystem to appear.

this planet also has a small hive which the whole population can fit on too in times of need.



Blood gods notes - I got nothing man, its good enough for me

------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

the last planet in the system and the coldest.

isus has one moon basically a giant comet cought long ago in its orbit.

isus....this worlds even though it has a relativly small magnetosphere is almost unaffected by the systems suns seasons. as it is quite far from the sun itself.
this planet is known as having a giant underground sea that supposedly contained an adeptus astartes monastery fortress. that many years ago got purged by the inquisition for using daemonic magics. this planets surface is quite inhosbitable with a wind chill factor of -500 below zero this planet is quite cold and is very windy. it has two great mountain ranges that burst out of the ice of its frozen sea. these giant mountain ranges seem to tear out of planets surface like they were a submerged submarine and they broke through the surface and the water splash froze with them. these ranges seems to divdie the wind up into even higher velocities and can blow away even a space marine with ease. the only other land mark on the generally flat ice world is a giant adamantium tower built from the surface to the warm seabed. exactly on top of the space marine monastery fortress. the worlds sea deep under are kept from being frozen by giant volcanoes and many hot springs that come from the planets core. these vents host many forms of life almost equalling solarus in life and variety. with one exception since almost no light reaches isus and let alone gets through the ice these creatures are all blind. using some sort of psychic communication these creatures use it to communicate to others of there species only. another seabed feature is the giant forests of kelp like seaweed. these grow alot almost covering the entire undersea world in kelp. but besides that there is very few more interesting charachteristics.

the fortress monastery is abandoned and can host small battles and has the tower which reaches outside. this tower is built in the mountain range built cunningly into the side of a mountain.
this monastery is one of the very few places (besides coastal flats along the mountain line and the mountains themselves) that battles can occur on this world due to its overwhelming temperature.

Blood gods notes - Decent bro, I like it

these are just my opinions of improvement, please take them as suggestions

caronis:

caronis is a very inhosbitable planet once valued for survival training employed by adeptus astartes and very brave imperial guard commanders. this planet was once inhabited by some flora many were very small and grew in small cracks in rocks. there was little life on the planet this being small morlike creatures deep under the giant sand dunes. this planet was able to support human life but quickly could'nt as a particularly violent awakening season form the sun threw a giant solar flare at the planet the flare quickly overwhelmed its small magneto-sphere causing the planet to insta fry quickly destroying all life and burning the sand dunes into giant waves of glass.

---------------------------------------------

Blood Gods revamp
Caronis was once a beuitiful planet briming with life and vegitation. Civilisations grew and fell as any inhabited planet is bound to do. Once valued for survival training employed by adeptus astartes and very brave imperial guard commanders. this planet was able to support human life but quickly could'nt as a particularly violent awakening season form the sun threw a giant solar flare at the planet the flare quickly overwhelmed its small magneto-sphere causing the planet to incinerate the surface quickly destroying all life and burning the planet to the core. All that stands is an eternal desert upon the surface. No life, no vegitation.

Blood gods notes - I liked the fluff but we need a planet that looks like paradise and tear any hopes of it ever returning back to such a state, I believe my addition helps bring that point to fruition
------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

purgatory (1 moon generally bigger in size and has small population living on it too)

this small planet hosts varios life forms many in its small lake like ocean. this planet generally remains unoccupied for reason including lack of water and edible substances. if terraformed this plent could be a very profitable agri-world or small population planet. the rarest life form here is a kind of mountain dragon that does'nt breathe fire but is still very fearsome. this planet is commonly likened to a tundra like forest. this planet warms up into a tropical like place in the awakening and generally slightly cools off in the great climax. there is a small imperial outpost maned by a small imperial guard regiment and a small population.

this world is generally a safe haven and defense could be set up here. in last ditch defence

---------------------------------------------

Blood Gods revamp
this small planet hosts varios life forms many in its small lake like ocean. this planet generally remains unoccupied for reason including lack of water and edible substances. if terraformed this planet could be a very profitable agri-world or small population planet. the rarest life form here is a breed of mountain dragon whos razor sharp claws rend both metal and flesh. Although not sharing its cousins traits of breathing fire it is still very fearsome creature. This planet is commonly likened to a tundra like forest. This planet warms up into a tropical like place in the awakening and generally slightly cools off in the great climax. there is a small imperial outpost maned by a small imperial guard regiment and a small population. Rumors of a small population of intelligent creature have been circling around. but no evidence has been forthcomming to support such an alegation.

this world is generally a safe haven and defense could be set up here. in last ditch defence

Blood Gods noted - Didnt change alot because it was pretty awesome on its own

------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

solarus 2 moons very small asteroid like....

this planet was once alot like purgatory until it was futher teraformed. this provided much more water and food.
this planets population is likend to warriors in every aspect as this worlds magneto-sphere was damaged ages ago by some rogue solar flare it is alot weaker then the other planets to the seasons.

before this system was rediscovered by the emperors holy crusade in ages past
the people living here had lived lives with generally advanced technology (this planet has had part of an STC plate recovered by the adeptus mechanicus and is being searched for more.) until a particularly well spoken dictator took over an entire continent he began to fortify his palace awaiting attack by his enemies in the north. (out of fluff note: this planet has had a world war kinda like WW2) he carved an entire mountain into the biggest fortress in the system. Fort Agron. during this he became more and more mad whiel the war progressed. the allies in the north began to get a upper hand and quickly seized control of most of the southern continent and its vital land link to the western continent and the great snowed one at the south pole. they then began to rally for the final attack against Agron. just as the attack began the holy crusade retook the system in the name of the emperor and destroyed completely the entire armies of each. and named the system solarus (previos name has been erased as its name suggests heresy)

fort Agron still stands today as the emperor himself landed upon its massive fort walls in ages past looking at the might of the planet itself.

this fort is open to battles and is alot like gondor from lord of the rings except twice the size.

Bloodgods notes - Absolutly perfect bro, nice job

------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

kargath (28 known moons more being discovered)

a great yellow super gas giant.

this planet itself is nearly unaffected by the suns seasons as its giant magnetosphere protects it and its moons form nearly any intrusion of the the suns radiation.
this planet seen from solaruses surface once every 10 years was worshipped as a god for many years on solarus and his arrival heralded times of triumph or plenty.
the planet itself is composed of a very odd mixture of hydrogen and many other gasses this mixture can be used as rocketfule and the imperium has interest in finding a way to harvest it.

its three major moons are as follows (each named after kargaths servants)

gremlin

gremlin is quite a large moon almost the size of a medium planet. this planet is very odd as its soil is green in addition to the monstrous jungles on it. although people can live here it is a death world inhabited by poisonous insects (of which the officio assinorium collects some of its many famed poisons from)giant and crazy beasts and wyverns.... wyverns from gremlin are monstrous beasts 75 feet in length from wing to wing. these creatures normally docile are easily provoked and can easily tear through a building or its unlucky inhabitants.

garton

garton is a very odd world of which its history is shrouded in mystery. its sky from its ground is a light glowing green. and it has many giant geysers sending forth giant streams of black acid like water high into its sky to rain back down into small pools of acid which collect into lakes at times. this moon is about the size of caronis (which is relativley medium sized) and is famed for its rugged mountain ranges and its black lakes. this world has few inhabitants as the black acid as it is called is quite like acid and destroys most genetic material on contact. this stuff seems to be protruding from the moons core from some unknown reaction. another odd feature of this moon is many strange ruins suggesting necrontyr activity many odd ages ago.... the best known feature of the planet is a giant obelisk protruding form high atop one of the mountains in the center of a giant caldera this obelisk is coated in pure gold but all attempts to land there have failed as the area is very rugged and the normally smooth cladera ground is full of black acid.

greth

greth is the only moon inhabited of the three giant ones

hosting a giant labratory station and a very small imperial guard regiment this planet is alot like earths primordial and sacred moon.
with no life but a terraformed atmosphere it is a very grey planet with no natural life but a population that is rising has slowly brough in sorrounding species from other worlds causing a small ecosystem to appear.

this planet also has a small hive which the whole population can fit on too in times of need.



Blood gods notes - I got nothing man, its good enough for me

------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

the last planet in the system and the coldest.

isus has one moon basically a giant comet cought long ago in its orbit.

isus....this worlds even though it has a relativly small magnetosphere is almost unaffected by the systems suns seasons. as it is quite far from the sun itself.
this planet is known as having a giant underground sea that supposedly contained an adeptus astartes monastery fortress. that many years ago got purged by the inquisition for using daemonic magics. this planets surface is quite inhosbitable with a wind chill factor of -500 below zero this planet is quite cold and is very windy. it has two great mountain ranges that burst out of the ice of its frozen sea. these giant mountain ranges seem to tear out of planets surface like they were a submerged submarine and they broke through the surface and the water splash froze with them. these ranges seems to divdie the wind up into even higher velocities and can blow away even a space marine with ease. the only other land mark on the generally flat ice world is a giant adamantium tower built from the surface to the warm seabed. exactly on top of the space marine monastery fortress. the worlds sea deep under are kept from being frozen by giant volcanoes and many hot springs that come from the planets core. these vents host many forms of life almost equalling solarus in life and variety. with one exception since almost no light reaches isus and let alone gets through the ice these creatures are all blind. using some sort of psychic communication these creatures use it to communicate to others of there species only. another seabed feature is the giant forests of kelp like seaweed. these grow alot almost covering the entire undersea world in kelp. but besides that there is very few more interesting charachteristics.

the fortress monastery is abandoned and can host small battles and has the tower which reaches outside. this tower is built in the mountain range built cunningly into the side of a mountain.
this monastery is one of the very few places (besides coastal flats along the mountain line and the mountains themselves) that battles can occur on this world due to its overwhelming temperature.

Blood gods notes - Decent bro, I like it

these are just my opinions of improvement, please take them as suggestions

:D

i gotta agree with all of the changes you did dude :D
only one problem though about caronis........
i thought of it as a little planet suffering for eternity and before and forever more.. that there was no real life on it..

my reasoning as beacause since its been orbiting around that star for eternity at the closest possible orbit while not being destroyed that it would always be lifeless and always has been but somehow managed to create a very odd for of life in the plants and wormlike creatures :D

oh yeah and the creatures are'nt morlike they are wormlike :D living deep in the ground... i forgot to fix my error and add that :D

and thats pretty much it :D

ALSO EVERYONE IN THIS FORuM THAT IS EXACTLY WHAT I WANT YOU TO DO.... :realmad:
just like what blood god did :D suggest re-makes and small changes that can fix messed up fluff and the like.... as we all gotta like the fluff to enjoy the campaign :D

:lol:

Pandora.

Pandora is the capital of the Yidran system. On it's own, it boosts two regiments of Imperial Guard to defend it. Largely, the planet is covered by a large hive. Immediately outside of that hive is a terrainless desert that extends to the nearest ocean. This is man made, for the sole purpose of making an attack approach more difficult. The rest of the planet is covered in very very scant forests.

On Pandora, the ruler of the Yidran system presides, and all reports of resources gathered and used are processed here. While the planet itself possesses no great value, the fact it's such a vital center for information means that it's destruction would result in chaos.



Chike

Chike is a vicious ice world. Originally, it was not part of the Yidran system, and is instead on the western fringe. It is actually from the nearest system. While there, the ruinous powers destroy the sun. Without gravity, the planet was a veritably sling-shotted at the Yidran system.

Humanity went underground, but animals above entered. Humans quickly bred and tamed Sargai to ride. Sargai were originally large lizards, but their genetics took a huge switch and now they're mammalian. Apperance wise, they're covered in thick white fur and on all fours, forwards legs slightly smaller. Their head is quite round, save for VERY large canines.

The only other animal is the Calin, which are just furry birds that have very healthy meat. Sargai are ridden to hunt this bird, thus supplying a food source.

Chike itself is not currently involved with the war, but it's wide orbit means that it will be entering soon, and when it does it can't expect to leave for quite some time.

Okay, I absolutely love this system fluff, but I believe it needs a couple more planets, for some variety. I'm going to write a quick bit of fluff on a Civilised and metropolized city-planet, kind of like coruscant from Star wars, but not as heavily urbanized.

Kanossus

Kanossus (any suggestions for a name are good)

Kanossus is a heavily urbanized and industrialized world, full of bustling cities, heavy manufactorums, and several large orbiting shipyards. It is host to a heavy Adeptus mechanicus presence, with several companies of Imperial guardsmen seeing the aid of many Tech-priest enginseers. Kanossus itself has raised 4 seperate regiments of Imperial guardsmen, and is guarded by 2 companies of Adeptus astartes. Its manufactorums supply over 85% of the weapons, munitions and war machines for the entire Solarus system, and the rest are imported from various worlds as Ryza, Kantrael, and Triplex Phall. Due to its strategic importance, it has a constant guard of several warships that remain stationed around the planet at all times, in case of an attack or incursion.

Feel free to edit this as you see fit.

as i said we NEED a planet on which we can have city fight, a planet which we can have jungle battles, a planet on which we can have ice world battles, a planet on which we can have desert battles, and as many other terrain types as possible...it makes the campaign more fun being able to have city fight etc.

as long as we have these im pretty much happy with the system heh

can we have the system map up soon blood god so we can see what it looks like yet?

I think Antioch's world is good for the citifight, Carnage.

However feel free to disagree. That is fine, diversity is good.

Anyways, I'll be getting to work on an idea of mine . . . . . . . secret for now, but. . . . .. .

You will see.

I'd really rather you posted it now.

You know...to save us from surprises when the campaign actually starts.

Okay, I absolutely love this system fluff, but I believe it needs a couple more planets, for some variety. I'm going to write a quick bit of fluff on a Civilised and metropolized city-planet, kind of like coruscant from Star wars, but not as heavily urbanized.

Kanossus

Kanossus (any suggestions for a name are good)

Kanossus is a heavily urbanized and industrialized world, full of bustling cities, heavy manufactorums, and several large orbiting shipyards. It is host to a heavy Adeptus mechanicus presence, with several companies of Imperial guardsmen seeing the aid of many Tech-priest enginseers. Kanossus itself has raised 4 seperate regiments of Imperial guardsmen, and is guarded by 2 companies of Adeptus astartes. Its manufactorums supply over 85% of the weapons, munitions and war machines for the entire Solarus system, and the rest are imported from various worlds as Ryza, Kantrael, and Triplex Phall. Due to its strategic importance, it has a constant guard of several warships that remain stationed around the planet at all times, in case of an attack or incursion.

Feel free to edit this as you see fit.

:D

i like it i can fit it between purgatory and solarus :D

i'll trya remake tell me if you like it :D (you take the credit for this planet antioch :D )

sun) caronis) purgatory) gnosis) kargeth) isus)

i like the name gnosis :D but if everyone agrees with the old name i will too :D

gnosis:
an heavily industrialized planet soon to be classified as a forgeworld by imperial standards as they get heavy imperial tithe breaks from the unusually heavy adeptus mechanicus presence. this planets history goes far back before the emperors power ever graced this system. many ages ago during the WW on neighboring pandora this planet was basically the only other human inhabited planet in the system. during the age before the emperoros will... this planet had been a major industrial presence in the system. as solarus and gnosis swing by each other every ten years they often trade using small space traveling ships nothing compared to the size of imperial cargo vessels. (this was a main source of technology for the WW on solarus as before the WW technology was on a level equal to earths industrilizing age. where guns and such were not horribly easy to manufacture as they were produced by gunsmiths instead of using mass production)
until one fatefull day gnosis and solarus were at there closest and a gnosis exploration craft landed on solarus... this came as a shock to solarians but gave them knowlegde of outer space. thus began the great understanding of other worlds and greater knowledge.(this was about 200 years before the WW)
after the great and holy crusade the planet was seen as a very valuable production center by the adeptus mechanicus and they began to intgrate themselves into the population and start up the production potential. this led to gnosis beating solarus in production and eventually passing in all technology,sciences,and even population at a point(this was reversed by the WW population boom on solarus). this planets surface used to be part desert part forest until the natives started to transform the desertland. (there is very few spots of desert on the planet left mainly they are used as parks) this led to a greener planet and eventually began to need outside sources of water. (this problem was solved once the crusade reached this system) after the crusade they built a giant artificial sea that eventually expanded with the cities on it. this led to almost the entire surface being taken over by the city but the original capital of the planet (the city of gnosis itself) is sorounded by the sea using it as a line of defence in the gravest emergencies and wars that occured from time to time.
so aside from the two giant parks in the southern hemisphere the entire surface is covered by the giant city. except what from oribit what looks like a giant crater with a giant island in the middle. this is gnosis itself..... sorounded by sea this planet is prabobly the second best protected planet in the system next to solarus, the capital itself. the planet itself has one moon used as a waste dump. this moon is unable to support life of any kind and is off limits to all imperial citizenry besides waste contractors. the planet also has 3 major orbital ship yards gnosis 1,2,3 respectivly. these host an imperial warfleet equal to that of the system of which ryza hails. the fleet is equal in size and payload of weapons per ship.

this planet is available for cityfight and small forest battles only. the moon has one land mass still visible and can be fought on. the orbital shipyard would have to be taken over or destroyed so the planet could be landed on. as this planet is almost the size of solarus it has 5 imperial guard regiments and hosts a small titan legion on leave from the eye of terror and abbadons last crusade. this planet can host battlefleet gothic battles with imperials defending (always)


and thats the fluff :D
(long eh? i was just ready to get soem writing outta my system :D )