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This looks interesting. It's a nice start, and I can feel the general personality of each character. I'm looking forward to more!
Space Marines- The ultimate representation of 'Bros before Hoes'
Although it's a little unclear whether this is an oddly-toned 40k story or just general sci-fi, it's great either way and I really enjoyed reading this (although I think it'd be easier to read if you just posted it straight to this forum, but whatever).
Like Mr. Hivemind said above, you've got across the personality of each character with great economy, not spending too long trying to describe any one thing. If there's any problem, I'd say that you could try and fix up yon apostrophies, there are a fair few misplaced throughout. It doesn't matter too much, but it makes your work easier to read.
So keep writing!