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Not sure if it's my eyes or not. But I can't really read the text. Nice drawing tho
Space Wolves- 4,000 pts
Dwarves in progress
This is pretty cool, I thought the whole no-I-don't-sleep exchange was hilarious!
I'm not sure I understand the narrative in the beginning, is that bro' Eiseinfaust dreaming, or his CO giving him his transfer order, or something else?
The strip has some minor problems with the flow of the artwork, like the placement of the "knock knock" sound effect. It's placed to the right of the marine, and since you read right from left the chronology appears strange, like he wakes up before actually being woken, as it were...
I see you've made him less complex than he was on your original concept, which is good, I think you've hit a good middle ground between realism and comic stylization here! His neck seems a tad long in places, the first panel in particular. SMs are usually depicted with almost no discernable neck, but I guess that's a question of taste eh?
The way you cropped his torso in the second to last panel doesn't look good, generally it looks better to fill the space you give yourself (which I suck at, myself). If you had left the panel bordeless, and bordered the last one I think it would have worked better.
That last panel strikes me as a bit odd, obviously it's narrative in purpose telling us that he's arrived at the his destination, but I think it would be more at home as the first panel in the second strip instead, but I need to see it before I can really say for sure. Hehehe, cutting this one after the fourth panel would give it a delightfully absurd humour.
I love the face on his chestplate, expression by proxy, go!
Finally, what program do you use for rendering text?
Argh, I always feel like an ass when giving crits! Hope I haven't squashed your ambitions to make more, I'll be interested in seeing where you go with this.
Well, I want to help you improve, not destroy your desire to draw. I could probably find lots more to pick at but it would be a bit unreasonable to think you can work on almost every aspect of your art all at once. Baby steps, baby steps.
Besides, contrary to what I might want you to think I really don't have a freakin' clue what I'm rambling on about. When I reach the standard of say, Ian Mcconville, you can start to take me seriously.