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Psipher19 · May 12th, 2004, 00:08

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Originally posted by Pandora@May 4 2004, 23

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You... You DARE to insult zombie's?!

yeah, ive seen so many bad zombie stories that its like the name of someone you dont like. if you see someone else with that name, your first impreasion tends to be bad.

Pandora · May 13th, 2004, 19:18

That's because you got raped.

To all the people that have no idea about the inside joke: Should I let the story die down, or put more effort into it? It takes awhile to write it, and I need to sit down and think about how to finish/ advance the story without making it redundent, or into a survival/ horror video-game cliche type deal. I should work on it, but I can't resist Diablo II's seductive skill system. (Must get Lightning Strike, only three levels away, nrrggg...)

Brother Malfunction · May 13th, 2004, 21:08

I like what I've read so far. The story might benefit from being edited a bit, cutting it into smaller pieces if you understand what I mean. Huge chunks of text tend to scare prospective readers away, and are a bit difficult to read. Just my five NOK.

Fallen Angel · May 13th, 2004, 21:37

As I have said earlier, I think that this story is bloody good and that you should keep up the good work

Pandora · May 13th, 2004, 23:45

Bah! Eventually it will be book sized, and if they don't want to read it, I'm not gonna make them, but thanks for the suggestion, I'll take it in mind.

Another update, a much longer one.

Brother Malfunction · May 14th, 2004, 08:05

Book sized is good, if you can pull it off. I didn't mean the story was too long.

But if you read through part one, and then look at part two and three you'll see that part one is a lot kinder on the eyes because you've separated it into several smaller blocks of text. That's what I was talking about.

Pandora · May 14th, 2004, 19:23

Hmm, that's so resonable... At this point, I've got like another chapter on my laptop, but I have no idea how to connect the two to a network, and I don't want to transfer them via cds, so if anybody out there knows how to set up a Windows Network, please throw me a line, I don't want to lose the work I did on my laptop yesterday night. (Kill Bill wasn't very good, and I had it on my lap...)

Pandora · May 15th, 2004, 03:33

Another update, a big one. I finally set up my network, so now I can work on the bus, at the game store, whatever, whenever ^_^.

Fallen Angel · May 21st, 2004, 18:51

Good

keep up the good work!

Shammah · May 21st, 2004, 20:45

Good Story. Keep writing.

At first I was starting to think it was genestealers rather than zombies.

May 13th, 2004, 19:18	#22 (permalink)
Pandora Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: California Posts: 560 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Rep Power: 72	That's because you got raped. To all the people that have no idea about the inside joke: Should I let the story die down, or put more effort into it? It takes awhile to write it, and I need to sit down and think about how to finish/ advance the story without making it redundent, or into a survival/ horror video-game cliche type deal. I should work on it, but I can't resist Diablo II's seductive skill system. (Must get Lightning Strike, only three levels away, nrrggg...) __________________ <a href='http://www.onpoint-marketing.com/stealth-marketing.htm' target='_blank'>The future of marketing is here! Stealth Marketing!</a> Wait, you mean that optimism isn't fashionable anymore?! Lord of Smart-ass Youthimizzles. Soup's up, bitches!

May 13th, 2004, 21:08	#23 (permalink)
Brother Malfunction Member Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Tromsø, Norway Age: 26 Posts: 66 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Rep Power: 69	I like what I've read so far. The story might benefit from being edited a bit, cutting it into smaller pieces if you understand what I mean. Huge chunks of text tend to scare prospective readers away, and are a bit difficult to read. Just my five NOK. __________________ Always do right. This will gratify some people and astonish the rest.

May 13th, 2004, 21:37	#24 (permalink)
Fallen Angel Member Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Nowhere Age: 19 Posts: 240 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Rep Power: 70	As I have said earlier, I think that this story is bloody good and that you should keep up the good work __________________ What doesn't kill you, cripples you for life Whoever invented the Rubix Cube had a sick and twisted sense of humor I will not eat oysters, i want my food dead, not sick, not wounded, dead.

May 13th, 2004, 23:45	#25 (permalink)
Pandora Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: California Posts: 560 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Rep Power: 72	Bah! Eventually it will be book sized, and if they don't want to read it, I'm not gonna make them, but thanks for the suggestion, I'll take it in mind. Another update, a much longer one. __________________ <a href='http://www.onpoint-marketing.com/stealth-marketing.htm' target='_blank'>The future of marketing is here! Stealth Marketing!</a> Wait, you mean that optimism isn't fashionable anymore?! Lord of Smart-ass Youthimizzles. Soup's up, bitches!

May 14th, 2004, 08:05	#26 (permalink)
Brother Malfunction Member Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Tromsø, Norway Age: 26 Posts: 66 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Rep Power: 69	Book sized is good, if you can pull it off. I didn't mean the story was too long. But if you read through part one, and then look at part two and three you'll see that part one is a lot kinder on the eyes because you've separated it into several smaller blocks of text. That's what I was talking about. __________________ Always do right. This will gratify some people and astonish the rest.

May 14th, 2004, 19:23	#27 (permalink)
Pandora Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: California Posts: 560 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Rep Power: 72	Hmm, that's so resonable... At this point, I've got like another chapter on my laptop, but I have no idea how to connect the two to a network, and I don't want to transfer them via cds, so if anybody out there knows how to set up a Windows Network, please throw me a line, I don't want to lose the work I did on my laptop yesterday night. (Kill Bill wasn't very good, and I had it on my lap...) __________________ <a href='http://www.onpoint-marketing.com/stealth-marketing.htm' target='_blank'>The future of marketing is here! Stealth Marketing!</a> Wait, you mean that optimism isn't fashionable anymore?! Lord of Smart-ass Youthimizzles. Soup's up, bitches!

May 15th, 2004, 03:33	#28 (permalink)
Pandora Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: California Posts: 560 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Rep Power: 72	Another update, a big one. I finally set up my network, so now I can work on the bus, at the game store, whatever, whenever ^_^. __________________ <a href='http://www.onpoint-marketing.com/stealth-marketing.htm' target='_blank'>The future of marketing is here! Stealth Marketing!</a> Wait, you mean that optimism isn't fashionable anymore?! Lord of Smart-ass Youthimizzles. Soup's up, bitches!

May 21st, 2004, 18:51	#29 (permalink)
Fallen Angel Member Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Nowhere Age: 19 Posts: 240 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Rep Power: 70	Good keep up the good work! __________________ What doesn't kill you, cripples you for life Whoever invented the Rubix Cube had a sick and twisted sense of humor I will not eat oysters, i want my food dead, not sick, not wounded, dead.

May 21st, 2004, 20:45	#30 (permalink)
Shammah Member Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Kansas Posts: 83 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Rep Power: 76	Good Story. Keep writing. At first I was starting to think it was genestealers rather than zombies. __________________ God does not play dice with the universe - Albert Einstein

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