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    Inquisitor Lucius Manda

    Inquisitor Lucius Manda´s story begins on Cthelle a feral death world near to the
    infamous planet of Catachan.
    Lucius grew up in one of the most deadly environments that man can immagine.
    From his youth he was ignored and hated by most people around him exept for his parents,
    but even they had a hard time loving their son.
    At the age of 14 Lucius lost both his parents to the harsh environment of Cthelle.
    Not long after the death of his parents he was inducted into an Imperial Guard regiment.
    This was the hardest time in his life for the young Lucius, all his commerades hated
    him and he was always chosen for the most filthy and dangerous tasks by his commanders.
    By luck and skill he survived the first 5 years, only growing thougher and stronger by
    his treatment.

    Somewhere in his 5th year his regiment was assigned to an Inquisitor hunting a large and
    powerfull Rouge Trader cell on Cthelle.
    After 4 months of hunting the cell through the steaming jungles on Cthelle they finally
    found the Rouge Trader cell in an abandoned mine deep in the jungle.

    Lucius´s regiment and the Inquisitor´s Retinue did not meet much resistance until they
    reached a large chamber deep in the mine.
    What they found here would forever change Lucius his life.
    Inside of the chamber were the Rouge Traders assambled and in their midds something
    much more powerfull...a Daemonhost.

    "Fire all at will" Shouted Inquisitor Menetz while blasting at the Daemonhost with his
    Psycannon.
    "You lot heard the Inquisitor....FIRE!!" Screamed the Sergeant.

    The whole regiment of Guardsmen opend fire with their lasguns, cutting down almost
    all of the Rouge traders and knocking the Daemonhost a few feet back.

    "Ha do you think this will stop us from killing you all here an now" Shouted one of the
    Rouge Traders while ducking for cover."Go Menzies, Kill them all"...
    ...."Yes Master" Replied the Daemonhost while unleashing bolts of pure warp at the
    Guardsmen and the Inquisitor.

    The Warpbolts killed almost the entire guardregiment but leaving Lucius standing in the middle
    unharmed.

    "Get in cover you fool" shouted Inquisitor Menetz to the dazed Lucius while pulling him out
    of the way from the daemonhost.
    "You fire at the Rouge Trader behind that desk, if we can kill him the daemon will probably
    evaporate, do you understand" Said Menetz to Lucius.
    "Ill fire at the Deamonhost and try to keep him away from us"
    "Yessir"Replied Lucius
    "Good... on my mark...Fire!!"They both jumped up from their cover and began firing at their
    target...only the psycannon did not fire.
    "Why? what is this?!!" Shouted Menetz

    The Daemon seeing that the Psycannon did not fire Charged straight at the Inquisitor only to
    stop 5 meters from both of them.

    "You...have an Pariah....with you.....as expected...from an Inquisitor" Said the Daemonhost

    "But that....will not save.... you or ....HIM!!" Screamed Menzies, while slashing at Lucius,
    ripping a deep gouge in his face.

    "That was your last mistake Daemonspawn" Shouted Menetz while running away from Lucius
    and the Daemonhost while opening fire with his Psycannon, Shooting the head from the Host
    and banishing the Daemon back to the Warp
    thus leaving the last Rouge Trader alone in the hands of the Inquisitor.

    "Damn you bastard!!" Screamed the Rouge Trader
    "You won´t get me alive and if i can take you with me i will do that" He screamed while throwing
    an Poisongas Grenade at Menetz, filling the whole room with poisonous gas.

    "Damn him" Cursed Menetz,"Fleeing from the Emperor´s Justice"He said while closing the helmet
    of his Powerarmor and putting the gasmask on the unconscious Lucius.

    This is how Lucius became an valuable "Untouchable" Interrogator under Inquisitor Menetz after
    treatment to his head and his lungs from the poisonous gas.
    Inquisitor Menetz died from an headshot by an Eldar sniper after teaching Lucius for almost 2 decades
    the skills required to become an Full Inquisitor, this he became 2 years after the death of his master.

    He eventualy reached the status of Inquisitor Lord after 5 and a half decades thanks to his succesfull
    campaign together with an Space Wolfs kill team agains a Thousand Sons Cult, where he proved to be
    an powerfull Inquisitor against Psychers.
    And for saving the leader of the Space Wolf kill team from the psychic attack from an Thousand Sons Luitenant he was presented by the Space Wolfs with an Frost Blade.



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    Hmm... Very tasty.

    I like this story, but the only thing that I find odd is that I figured that once he was found out to be an untouchable, wouldn't he be immediately shipped off to the Culexus Temple?

    I would also figure he'd be older, to achieve Inquisitior Lord Status, but nothing's impossible. Has his age been affected by Warp Travel at all?

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    Stats

    Here are the stats for:

    Name:Inquisitor Lucius Manda
    Age:136 years
    Status:Inquisitor Lord
    Cost:292.5Pt

    Stats:
    WS BS St To I Wp Sg Nv Ld Speed
    90 70 84 65 90 85 90 95 95 6/7

    Armor:
    Full Arteficier Power Armor: 11
    Full Body Refractor Shield: D10

    Equipment:
    Frost Blade
    Bolter (MK IV Sickle Mag)
    1 Bolter Reload
    Highly Advanced Bionic Brain
    Advanced Bionic-Pair Lungs
    Medi-Pack

    Skills:
    Leader
    Swordmaster
    First Strike
    Parry
    Deflect Shot

    Exotic Skill:
    Pariah

    Any Questions or Suggestions?


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    Not all Untouchables are shipped to the Culexus temple, some are taken by inquisitors inn their retinue because they are invaluable agains psychers
    and yes he is quite young but also very succesfull because of his Untouchable skill


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    Quote Originally Posted by nexus-star View Post
    Here are the stats for:

    Name:Inquisitor Lucius Manda
    Age:136 years
    Status:Inquisitor Lord
    Cost:292.5Pt
    Fair enough.

    Stats:
    WS BS St To I Wp Sg Nv Ld Speed
    90 70 84 65 90 85 90 95 95 6/7


    Wow, this guy is tough. It only makes sense, he is an =][= Lord, so its only natural to have high stats. Just remember, you're more likely to have fun with lower stats.


    Armor:
    Full Arteficier Power Armor: 11
    Full Body Refractor Shield: D10


    Okay, just remember that he gets a XX% Strength bonus from the power armour.


    Equipment:
    Frost Blade
    Bolter (MK IV Sickle Mag)
    1 Bolter Reload
    Highly Advanced Bionic Brain
    Advanced Bionic-Pair Lungs
    Medi-Pack


    Not bad, no problems here.

    Skills:
    Leader
    Swordmaster
    First Strike
    Parry
    Deflect Shot


    Blademaster here is redundant. He isn't carrying a knife on him, so this skill is useless. You could either add a knife or switch for a new power.


    Exotic Skill:
    Pariah


    Fluffy.

    Any Questions or Suggestions?
    Don't forget that this isn't 40k, you can carry more than two weapons, but just make sure to be reasonable. I don't forsee a character carrying three swords and two large bolters. :tongue:

    I'd also think of carrying a basic pistol, you said you wanted him to be and uber CC character, so give him some extra CC punch.

    Also, go to the Specialist Games website to download articles for inquisitor, there are some cool character ideas and new rules and equipment to use for inquisitor.

    EDIT: @the post above: Fair enough.

    Games Workshop Specialist Games

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    Blademaster is for Daggers and the like but he has Swordmaster so that is right:tongue:
    and i was thinking about giving him an pistol but i dont know yet:rolleyes:

    And you dont want to see the Chaos lord that we have to fight at the end of the campaign
    Last edited by nexus-star; January 30th, 2007 at 15:13.


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    OK lets sdeal with the fluff first@
    Quote Originally Posted by nexus-star View Post
    Inquisitor Lucius Manda´s story begins on Cthelle a feral death world near to the
    infamous planet of Catachan.
    Make a distinction between systems not planets
    Lucius grew up in one of the most deadly environments that man can immagine.
    Space? Gas Giant? molten lava?
    From his youth he was ignored and hated by most people around him exept for his parents,
    but even they had a hard time loving their son.
    At the age of 14 Lucius lost both his parents to the harsh environment of Cthelle.
    Not long after the death of his parents he was inducted into an Imperial Guard regiment.
    This was the hardest time in his life for the young Lucius, all his commerades hated
    him and he was always chosen for the most filthy and dangerous tasks by his commanders.
    By luck and skill he survived the first 5 years, only growing thougher and stronger by
    his treatment.
    Last sentence is bad grammar, I can see what you are dancing round but think you can state it or present it far better, eg:

    From his earliest memeries Lucious found himself an outcast, he made all those around him uncomfortable, even his parents. Unsurprisingly, upon their death when Lucious was 14, no one was prepared to take the strange, unlikeable child on, and he was quickly dispatched into cadette school..etc

    Note, do you mean IG or PDF?
    Somewhere in his 5th year his regiment was assigned to an Inquisitor hunting a large and
    powerfull Rouge Trader cell on Cthelle.
    Here and later you seem to missunderstand Rogue traders, a Rogue trader is someone issed with a warrant if you like, they are very powerfull mostly owning ships or even fleets, potentially with forces from the Eclisarchy, IG or even Astares seconded to them, a cell of the? That would be akin to a cell of SM commanders!

    Equally, being a Rogue trader does not make you an enemy of the imperium, quite the reverse
    After 4 months of hunting the cell through the steaming jungles on Cthelle they finally
    found the Rouge Trader cell in an abandoned mine deep in the jungle.
    There is that cell again, and jungle or jungles? you donmt need to keep restating the planets name and if it is IG then it is more than likely that it would not be on his home planet
    Lucius´s regiment and the Inquisitor´s Retinue did not meet much resistance until they
    reached a large chamber deep in the mine.
    What they found here would forever change Lucius his life.
    Inside of the chamber were the Rouge Traders assambled and in their midds something
    much more powerfull...a Daemonhost.
    I think you mean midst, and i think this area of the story needs far more detail
    "Fire all at will" Shouted Inquisitor Menetz while blasting at the Daemonhost with his
    Psycannon.
    "You lot heard the Inquisitor....FIRE!!" Screamed the Sergeant.

    The whole regiment of Guardsmen opend fire with their lasguns, cutting down almost
    all of the Rouge traders and knocking the Daemonhost a few feet back.
    Erm, Regiment = 8000+ men conventionally, even elite regiments like 23rd Elysians have in excess of 1000, with a sergent for ever 10 men, a leutenant in charge of each platoon, a captain or Major in charge of each comany and a colonel in charge overal, pluss his staff officers, this would have to be an immense chamber, no way the entire regiment can shoot at a single thing, and there would conventionally be 6-800 Sergents present, which one shouted?
    "Ha do you think this will stop us from killing you all here an now" Shouted one of the
    Rouge Traders while ducking for cover."Go Menzies, Kill them all"...
    ...."Yes Master" Replied the Daemonhost while unleashing bolts of pure warp at the
    Guardsmen and the Inquisitor.

    The Warpbolts killed almost the entire guardregiment but leaving Lucius standing in the middle
    unharmed.
    Erm that is again way overkill
    "Get in cover you fool" shouted Inquisitor Menetz to the dazed Lucius while pulling him out
    of the way from the daemonhost.
    You may like to rethink this, I for one, should I be the inquisitor, would not be too worried about the last Imperial Guardsman surrounded by 8000 dead ones, and indeed his c hances of reaching him without a two minute jog over the pile of dead boddies would be low
    "You fire at the Rouge Trader behind that desk, if we can kill him the daemon will probably
    evaporate, do you understand" Said Menetz to Lucius.
    "Ill fire at the Deamonhost and try to keep him away from us"
    "Yessir"Replied Lucius
    Hmm nice of the baddies to wait politely whilst they had this little chat
    "Good... on my mark...Fire!!"They both jumped up from their cover and began firing at their
    target...only the psycannon did not fire.
    "Why? what is this?!!" Shouted Menetz

    The Daemon seeing that the Psycannon did not fire Charged straight at the Inquisitor only to
    stop 5 meters from both of them.

    "You...have an Pariah....with you.....as expected...from an Inquisitor" Said the Daemonhost

    "But that....will not save.... you or ....HIM!!" Screamed Menzies, while slashing at Lucius,
    ripping a deep gouge in his face.

    "That was your last mistake Daemonspawn" Shouted Menetz while running away from Lucius
    and the Daemonhost while opening fire with his Psycannon, Shooting the head from the Host
    and banishing the Daemon back to the Warp
    thus leaving the last Rouge Trader alone in the hands of the Inquisitor.

    "Damn you bastard!!" Screamed the Rouge Trader
    "You won´t get me alive and if i can take you with me i will do that" He screamed while throwing
    an Poisongas Grenade at Menetz, filling the whole room with poisonous gas.
    yuou dont need to keep restating poison gas[/quote]
    "Damn him" Cursed Menetz,"Fleeing from the Emperor´s Justice"He said while closing the helmet
    of his Powerarmor and putting the gasmask on the unconscious Lucius.

    This is how Lucius became an valuable "Untouchable" Interrogator under Inquisitor Menetz after
    treatment to his head and his lungs from the poisonous gas.
    Inquisitor Menetz died from an headshot by an Eldar sniper after teaching Lucius for almost 2 decades
    the skills required to become an Full Inquisitor, this he became 2 years after the death of his master.

    He eventualy reached the status of Inquisitor Lord after 5 and a half decades thanks to his succesfull
    campaign together with an Space Wolfs kill team agains a Thousand Sons Cult, where he proved to be
    an powerfull Inquisitor against Psychers.
    And for saving the leader of the Space Wolf kill team from the psychic attack from an Thousand Sons Luitenant he was presented by the Space Wolfs with an Frost Blade.[/QUOTE]
    A little unlikely, there are not a lot of those to go around, they dont appear much under the Xmas tree on Fenris

    Sorry if that sounded harsh, but I think it needs work, on the other hand the fact Iread it to the end means at least it has potential

    As for the character, he is exceedingly over powered, frankly I would tell anyone wanting to use him in my campaigns where to go.
    Now if you are facing an army of similar characters then fine, but really then it becomes about powergaming, which is not really what =][= is about

    Again, sorry, not putting it as nicvely as Adrian, but most of this is explained in the inquistor books, =][= isnt about who has teh biggest gun, it isnt a classical RPG like D&D but a narative one, a good GM will play you out the campaign
    Everything you have been told is a lie!


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    Quote Originally Posted by Cheredanine View Post
    OK lets sdeal with the fluff first@
    Make a distinction between systems not planets

    Space? Gas Giant? molten lava?

    Last sentence is bad grammar, I can see what you are dancing round but think you can state it or present it far better, eg:

    From his earliest memeries Lucious found himself an outcast, he made all those around him uncomfortable, even his parents. Unsurprisingly, upon their death when Lucious was 14, no one was prepared to take the strange, unlikeable child on, and he was quickly dispatched into cadette school..etc

    Note, do you mean IG or PDF?
    Here and later you seem to missunderstand Rogue traders, a Rogue trader is someone issed with a warrant if you like, they are very powerfull mostly owning ships or even fleets, potentially with forces from the Eclisarchy, IG or even Astares seconded to them, a cell of the? That would be akin to a cell of SM commanders!

    Equally, being a Rogue trader does not make you an enemy of the imperium, quite the reverse

    There is that cell again, and jungle or jungles? you donmt need to keep restating the planets name and if it is IG then it is more than likely that it would not be on his home planetI think you mean midst, and i think this area of the story needs far more detail

    Erm, Regiment = 8000+ men conventionally, even elite regiments like 23rd Elysians have in excess of 1000, with a sergent for ever 10 men, a leutenant in charge of each platoon, a captain or Major in charge of each comany and a colonel in charge overal, pluss his staff officers, this would have to be an immense chamber, no way the entire regiment can shoot at a single thing, and there would conventionally be 6-800 Sergents present, which one shouted?

    Erm that is again way overkill

    You may like to rethink this, I for one, should I be the inquisitor, would not be too worried about the last Imperial Guardsman surrounded by 8000 dead ones, and indeed his c hances of reaching him without a two minute jog over the pile of dead boddies would be low
    Hmm nice of the baddies to wait politely whilst they had this little chatyuou dont need to keep restating poison gas
    "Damn him" Cursed Menetz,"Fleeing from the Emperor´s Justice"He said while closing the helmet
    of his Powerarmor and putting the gasmask on the unconscious Lucius.

    This is how Lucius became an valuable "Untouchable" Interrogator under Inquisitor Menetz after
    treatment to his head and his lungs from the poisonous gas.
    Inquisitor Menetz died from an headshot by an Eldar sniper after teaching Lucius for almost 2 decades
    the skills required to become an Full Inquisitor, this he became 2 years after the death of his master.

    He eventualy reached the status of Inquisitor Lord after 5 and a half decades thanks to his succesfull
    campaign together with an Space Wolfs kill team agains a Thousand Sons Cult, where he proved to be
    an powerfull Inquisitor against Psychers.
    And for saving the leader of the Space Wolf kill team from the psychic attack from an Thousand Sons Luitenant he was presented by the Space Wolfs with an Frost Blade.[/QUOTE]
    A little unlikely, there are not a lot of those to go around, they dont appear much under the Xmas tree on Fenris

    Sorry if that sounded harsh, but I think it needs work, on the other hand the fact Iread it to the end means at least it has potential

    As for the character, he is exceedingly over powered, frankly I would tell anyone wanting to use him in my campaigns where to go.
    Now if you are facing an army of similar characters then fine, but really then it becomes about powergaming, which is not really what =][= is about

    Again, sorry, not putting it as nicvely as Adrian, but most of this is explained in the inquistor books, =][= isnt about who has teh biggest gun, it isnt a classical RPG like D&D but a narative one, a good GM will play you out the campaign[/QUOTE]

    First i lkie to say that this is my first try ever on a Roleplaying Character and he did not seem to overpowerd to me for an Inquisitor Lord.
    and for spelling, i am not english and its quite difficult to write a whole story.
    third you asked for some things that are explained later like, what regiment? IG PDF and what kind of deathworld

    Grtz Nexus


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    ok not worried about spelling, a spell checker will sort that, grammar is a little different, but even so,

    Stuff that needed some detail - IG is distinct from PDF, what you are describing, particularly since it takes place on his home world, is probably PDF

    or are you asking me to explain what PDF is?

    You really dont seem to understand Rogue Traders
    Everything you have been told is a lie!


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    I know what rouger Traders are and what status they have in the Imperium, but you can´t say that they can´t turn to chaos and i think Inquisitors are the only people who can go against an Rouge Trader.
    I also know the difference between IG and PDF and the IG is not restricted to off planet fights only.


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