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A few comments:
you might want to try writing a bit slower, the first part especially could be written in much more detail.
Use a spell checker, it makes it a lot more pleasant to read.
Try not to glorify the SM too much, right now it looks like the Tau don't manage to kill even a single SM whilst getting massacred themselves.
Stay away from existing special characters, and never make them die if you do use them! It only makes the story unbelievable.
Rest isn't bad though, work a bit on what I said above and it would be much better :) .
 

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Ahh, well if you write a story about things that actually happened in a battle maybe you should post it as a battle report instead, or at least mention that it's based on an actual battle :) .
 
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